Black Poetry : ...check it...

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  1. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sandstone teeth so pearly gleamed
    as you
    watch me step out of my mind to
    grace your scene
    with
    vocalizations brought from a
    dimension
    born from a sphere
    hyped on
    education enunciation’s
    fantastical invocations
    …bend your ear…
    check it…
    you stare
    and
    wonder why my head appears to be
    so swelled
    so I’ll share with you that it’s been
    successfully engorged by
    lunar tales
    and a star’s knowledge
    a millennium’s life missions
    a
    clear
    eyed
    …love…
    I’ve been promoted to this position since
    Incarnation
    And
    live it with
    …intensity
    that’s why at times I seem to
    …float…
    my brain sometimes goes home to
    drift amongst the clouds
    but
    …my feet are firmly planted
    and
    I walk this world with a heavy stick
    Vulcan my born day’s ruler has left me
    …lame
    but has made up for it with the offer of this staff
    and with it
    I
    rule
    the favor I offer…
    a coronation of peace
    accept my understanding as I do you
    cause
    the lessons that I have to drop down
    to your mind
    will
    ship you out to the stratosphere…
    now feel this…
    I’ve been told that I aint **** since I could
    steady my own
    …stroll…
    all alone
    all those whispers of
    …********…
    siphoned through
    loud
    and
    clear
    and I
    …still got down
    …get down
    drop that **** now
    and
    all that I can do is
    …smile…
    check my gleam…
    I’ve trampled through that ********
    And
    check it…
    my shoes remain clean
    unspoiled while
    some still toil with acceptance of
    …self-knowledge
    …cellular wealth
    …lost in secular mouth functions
    …a perpetual lost junket
    …still investing in the ticket
    while
    believing spending another’s
    life’s
    dime
    exhausting themselves all the while
    and
    check it…
    I still smile
    I may not be riding the gravy train
    …at the moment but
    check it…
    I’m still in motion
    my cells lotion
    …knowledge
    …clear third eye vision
    constantly
    evolving
    and
    my spine stretches all the more…
    my right hand outstretched
    may seem poor
    but
    in my left I
    …hold life
    …grasp it
    …own it
    I was born into it
    so why shouldn’t I?
    Why shouldn’t I
    Speak clearly
    So that
    You’ll do more than just hear me
    …See me
    …Feel me
    ‘Cause in the least
    I can say that I
    See
    You
    Check it…


    2002 ALLME
     
  2. Bishop

    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Checking it....and loving this piece...Nothing but finger snaps on this one here!!
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    LiLi

    Great job.

    I would love to hear this poem read or recited BY you.


    :toast: :D
     
  4. PloeMorphic

    PloeMorphic Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight

    piece is well written. Peace
     
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    this is definitely some open mic **** right here....check it, I was diggin' this piece.
     
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    LiLi.. This was a masterpiece!! As Bishop said... Fingersnaps and Daps!!
     
  7. LiLi

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    good mornin

    er'body! lol

    thank you so much for your kind words! they are truly appreciated! i...hmmm, recited does really seem to do it, let's try...performed this one this week at an open mic that i host...or better yet mc (there's a whole lotta passion up in that joint lol) and it was very well accepted!

    thanks again fabulous poets!!
     
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