Black Poetry : Caught UP

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by thatgirl74, Mar 24, 2004.

  1. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Caught up
    in
    Your eyes
    Your Voice
    Your touch.
    I find my self doing things that I would never do before.
    Caring about things that are so insignificant.
    I can't function until I hear from you.
    I don't breath until I see you.
    You set the rythm of my heart beat.
    I am too vunerable.
    My every thought surronds you.
    You are like a whirlwind or a tornadoe that has just
    touched down on my heart.
    And even though you can cause so much destruction
    I long for the winds and rains that you bring to my life.
    I wish I could put into words how you make me feel.

    Wait I just did.
     
  2. sarcasm4eva

    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was def. a tyte poem. maybe i read it to early in the mornin n thats why its hittin to close to home.reminded me of how i used to feel about someone, or wait, is it i still feel the same. much love, keep writin. :)
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    feelin ya flow
    nice drop
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    I like It. Nice flow
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yep you sure did...

    and very well I might add.

    thanks for sharing the excitement of
    a stormy love affair :)


    feelin'it souldeep!
    Coco :heart:
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thatgirl,
    nicely penned expression of being overwhelmed by another.......

    Peace and Blessings...
     
  7. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am loving all the feedback I am getting thanks for the encouragement.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You certainly did put those emotions into words, and very well, indeed.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very well done love the flava on dis here flow on sistah
     
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    Thought this was so sweet!
    Tyte piece!
     
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