Black Poetry : CAUGHT IN THE ACT(OF PASSION)

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  1. naija-man

    naija-man Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I kind of got stuck in the process of creating an ending.

    Slow breaths, hearts pulsating,
    body straining from passion.
    eyes and heart locked in a trance,
    midnight starts sparkle and reflect in her eyes,
    I'm capitivated and lost in her vybez.
    she drowns me in her ocean of soft-sweet aura.
    I try to fight it, but it's pointless.

    I weaken to her seductive charms,
    she takes me deeper into a pool of passion.
    Her words are like liquid silk pouring thru' me.
    I touch and taste her lips,...I know she's forbidden fruit.
    Her juices are sweet yet poisonous.

    I stopped and look at myself with dissapointment.
    weakened and seduced by her bodily art....noy meant for my eyes
    her soft voice not meant for my ears.
    I try 2 look away but her hazel eyez trap me.
    i tell her 2 leave..and she calmly walks out of the room.

    Visions before me, tears falling down a female face
    my girlfriend...i see her standing..I've been caught!


    I cannot fink of a good ending 4 my poem!...????
     
  2. GHETTOAMBITION

    GHETTOAMBITION Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I waz feelin this piece,it had so much many, this made me think of fightin temptation..lol..i cud say more, but i cant find da words..buh flow on wit passion

    **blacklove**
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    nice joint....felt every line
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SO GOOD!!!

    U don't need no ending.
    This is hot!!!!
     
  5. spicybrown

    spicybrown Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nevertheless. tis a splendid read:spinstar:

    :read:

    :picture:
     
  6. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    naija:
    That was lovely. You can let it
    like that, but on 2nd thought
    I wanna know what happens.:)
    I enjoyed it all the same.
    Very nice scribe.


    Much Luv
     
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