Black Poetry : caught by you

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  1. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Caught by you

    Once upon a time
    You caught my I
    and my soul
    My whole is trapped in you
    And I can’t express
    I can’t confess
    cause you are taken

    What can I say
    I want to tell you
    I’m yours

    How can you let me go
    when you don’t even know
    -My heart- does not lie
    My dreams do
    Caught by you.
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nice piece love the heart /dream twist
    let it flow on out .....Tyte
     
  3. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When it's all said and done!

    Superbly written with sweet surrender and tenderness an eloquent but simple love poem for the true romantic, hope you repost in February!
    Blessings On Ya House!
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lovewhat it do...
    nice flow
     
  5. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ahhhhh....*sigh of relaxation* gotta love love.:eek:
    much love,
    -story
     
  6. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I would like to hear the whole story behind this one. sounds kinda familiar (LOL)
     
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    Cindy Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh wow.... this was truly touching!
    Nice to have you here...
    Wow, holland!
    :heart:
    Don't stop believing in love...
    :wave:
    wowww..... holland....
     
  8. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :) :) :heart: :heart:
    I NEVER expected this.....I just needed to express my heart
    and here I am receiving so much
    thank you

    :heart: rich thankyou for your words and your comment in particular...it just came out like that (simple, but true)...much love

    :heart: thank you msluciousb this is my first time here. I just wanted to say that your words really touched me, cause I wrote this poem last night, after I came home and needed to put words on paper that I can not say. But your words weren't just a reply they were a truth. At that moment I felt tender and the need to surrender and just keep it simple.
    The romantic part is also true...And I will repost in February.
    -Blessings on YOUR house-

    :heart: thank u mzblkangel...never imagined my words doing
    this...much love

    :heart: also lotsa thank u's to you story. glad to make you feel that way...much love

    :heart: thank you cindy, when I read your reply, it made me
    smile. And thank you for the warm welcome..:love: I could never loose my faith in love...much love

    :heart: last one is for you shaz: thank you. sounds kinda curious(LOL)....ok but here it goes...once I saw a guy that caught my eye, I decided to go and sit next to him in the bus and tell him he had a beautiful afro. we talked during a bustrip of about 10 minutes and till this day I remember everything we said (ok I'm exxagerating, 'almost' everything). But it was all nice. I use to bump into him a couple of times and all that time I didn't realise (denied) that he got me the first time I saw him.
    But because I respect every relationship and so also romanticlove ones: husband/wife; girlfiend/boyfriend etc.,
    I choose to never come between to lovers. And because he's involved I would never express my feelings to him. We are friends now (and sometimes I wonder if that is such a good idea), but the thing is we hardly see eachother.
    But it was about 8 months ago, when it all started and my feelings are still here and I still have to love him in silence.
    So it's like that....(wrote a lot, thought it would be nice for you to know)
    let me know what you think...did you spot any similarities
    much love
     
  9. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the worse pain...is to be right next to someone and can't have them (i read that somewhere)...and your poem brought that to mine...i hope for you that love either gives you chance, or releases you. much love for this piece.
     
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    "-My heart- does not lie
    My dreams do
    Caught by you."
    TIGHT, i got chills from this.
     
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