Black Poetry : Caught Between 1st & 2nd Thoughts

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by ladyx, Aug 12, 2001.

  1. ladyx

    ladyx Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    (maybe we could've talked?....)


    I've been reading lately
    and it seems you've
    been making your
    usual depressions

    upon unsuspecting hearts
    ...doing
    your usual fits
    and starts

    my dear, when are you
    gonna learn?
    and have you thought
    about this bridge you might
    burn?

    I've been here
    although you've flittered
    away
    our children are grown & gone
    but your part will always
    stay

    and no, I couldn't let
    you in the other night
    and yes, I love you
    but that wouldn't make it right

    Have you looked at yourself
    in all honesty?
    Or are you still blaming our
    downfall all on me?

    Did you only come to me
    just to cum again?
    Or is that adorable, perpetual boy
    finally becoming a real man?

    I've been reading lately
    and you've been making
    your usual depressions...

    and I hope you live to
    learn at least
    one of life's lessons


    X
     
  2. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THERE COMES A TIME WHEN A MAN MUST BE A MAN...

    glad to hear you're reading
    staying in touch with life's lessons
    but your readings must be confusing
    there are not hearts with which i've been messing
    around
    here and there
    and leaving my impressions
    i've lived that scenario
    it's too damned depressing

    oh,

    'bout the other night
    i just stopped by to say
    how sorry i am
    for the pain i brought {your way}

    i know you didn't deserve it
    just wanted you to know
    i never blamed you, babe
    ...just didn't know what you know

    i was playing at being a man
    now, i'm the real deal
    know how to treat a woman
    ...how a woman wants to feel

    thought i could show you
    all the changes i've made
    thought i could be your man
    not the boy who hurt you, babe

    and

    'bout those lessons
    you wanted me to learn
    i've become a master
    now i want a second turn

    to share all of my love {with you}

    STRAIGHT FLOW.

    One.
     
  3. MapleXtract

    MapleXtract Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oooh...

    [SIZE=huge]...I felt this from
    somewhere down in
    the depths. Simply,
    amazing skill
    just leapin'
    outta this piece.
    It reads- to me-
    as, somewhat, of a
    subtle vent.
    *Diggin' this flow*:)
    [/SIZE]
     
  4. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ladyx

    I'm definitely feelin' the 'talent'.... I know you gotz some more just by the way you came with this piece heah!

    Lookin' forward to readin' more!

    Thank you for sharing this here!

    One luv.
     
  5. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    speak the truth

    feeling the growth factor here :)

    pd

    by the way, we're having our works
    published in an Anthology

    if you are interested, please post a
    reply expressing your personal interest


    we would like to have you
     
  6. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm feeling this sis!

    it behooves us all to know the heartache and devastation that can come from a burned bridge. :)

    say it, Poetess! so good to see you here, always!

    a
     
  7. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    True....good flow LadyX!!!

    :heart:
    GQ
     
  8. Mr marion

    Mr marion Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I have burned a few bridges in my day;
    Mainly bridges that were weak .
    Throughout the fires I have learned lessons...
    lessons thatt keeps me off the same type of bridge.
    Very nice flow>!
     
  9. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    decisions

    decisions
    especially hard
    we you have an unwilling
    partner

    cool piece
    DSSNY
     
  10. SuNNiOne

    SuNNiOne Active Member MEMBER

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    The 'X' must mean xcellent. Because that's what
    this was. I felt it. Deeply!
     
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