Black Poetry : Catch My Drift

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by SensualReality, Jul 18, 2004.

  1. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Searching
    endlessly,forever
    Trapped in this place
    No air to breath no sun in my sky for light to my path
    Just endless time basking away in nothingness
    Trying to find me
    A being created with a purpose
    To live,love,and spread love
    Once you get you must give
    Right now I feel like there's nothing out there for me
    A love to call my own
    A friend to lay my head on their pillow
    The garden is locked away and so is my secrets
    I wish I had someone I could tell about my feelings
    Is there a heart in the house tonight?
    My heartbeat calls out for surgery
    Do you understand why my mind is so complex
    People think they know me,but have no idea
    I barely know myself
    So how should you...they..us...we
    Catching My Drift is like a black person in the KKK...........
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    But I beg to differ, there is someone out there who will "get" you. Until then, vibe on just being you, there is so much in you already that is wonderful. Oh, and yes, I liked the way you drew your reader into this piece. :)
     
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    Yes, I am...here's a heart in the house tonight, tomorrow, next week...infact, whenever your heart want to gossip with mines ...it's there.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well said and done i feel ya on dis ! somebody stand up if u understand
     
  5. MrBlak

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    There are definitely people who can identify with similar feelings to do with their social and romantic lives. Writting about it is a good release for feelings like that ..... you are lucky to have poetic skills so others can read what you gotta say and be entertained by your skills.

    You get your feelings across real good on this one. I couldnt have done that a 16!! I was too busy having mood swings and being angry at the world. Nice peice.
     
  6. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Watz thanx and I always try to make you feel me:wink:

    queentswana thank you for the heart :peace:

    Rich.....STAND UP,cuz u get a gold medal :lol:

    MrBlak thanx for the love and yes I may be 16,but as you said I got a lot in this lil' mind :D
     
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    Your line, "once you get you must give" lets me know you are wise beyond your years. I do feel ya, SR. Too much, actually. But don't despair, my friend. Just keep pushing on and have faith. Much love.
     
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    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for the love Gempis :luv: :jumping:
     
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    there is always someone who has
    worn a pair of shoes very similar
    and as hard as it may be to fathom
    your drift is felt by many...

    tyte flow poet...keep it going
     
  10. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was posed so well
    i hear ya on this
    nice work sis
    Peace
    Angel
     
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