Black Poetry : Catastrophe

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  1. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I
    began to
    hyperventilate
    with thoughts of
    literal heart break
    as I felt the tempests
    rumble in my chest and
    preach of future blood-filled
    tornadoes whirling inside of my
    ventricles. Pain did not hesitate to
    rear its grotesquely beautiful head and
    it struck me in brilliance like stage lights
    embellishing intimidation; my heart had no
    patience and began to rage the eternal theories
    of poor health and high cholesterol. My hand fibbed
    on my chest and pledged alliegance to the near heavens
    hoping to gain prosperity in faithfulness and overcome this
    horrendous brutality which is never really expended until fatally
    the pain is expelled and experienced, portrayed almost painless
    by the ignoramus television and almost as beautiful and poignant
    as drowning - in frustration I yearn to curse all those who
    believe such nonsense with all of the combustion my
    fragile heart is brewing but is pitifully unable to spew
    the excessity of pain. I fall, winding down like a
    beautiful china plate falling off of the kitchen
    table and shattering into too many pieces
    to be fixed and as this happens, all I can
    seem to imagine is how painful it must
    be to feel your lungs fill up with water
    while drowning, as if straying
    thoughts would kill the
    monster in my chest
    fatally named cardiac
    arrest.

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well now , i like how this was done flow on........................
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sculpted like an artist, even down to the structure of this piece. You've got my attention, do flow on.
     
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    Whoa, I am loving this unique concept and flow. Really captured me.
     
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    I loved the way that this flowed. Nice seein you again:wave:
     
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