Quiet Poetry Lounge : Cast Away

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Phenomenon, Jun 13, 2008.

  1. Phenomenon

    Phenomenon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    One person tried to love you
    Just because they wanted closure
    One person tried to love you
    With lonely fears of getting older
    One person tried to love you
    Because of all the things you did
    But which one of them gave you
    The types of things that I could give

    I loved you with
    God’s heartbeat
    Sweet melodies played
    Every time you’d say my name
    It just sounded better that way
    But today…
    You said you didn’t love me anymore

    One person thought they understood you
    Just because they knew what food you liked
    One person thought they understood you
    Because you had a lot going for your life
    One person thought they understood you
    With memories of just the good times
    But which of them understood you
    In the way I had in mind

    I knew you with
    God’s wisdom
    Attention by the soul controlled me
    Every time you’d hold me
    Knowing you, made me know me
    But recently
    You said you didn’t want me anymore

    You cast me away from your existence
    But I can’t force you to keep me
    So I’ll wait on this island
    Until a new ship comes and finds me
    I saw you as my future
    But destiny left you behind me
    You can keep trying those other people if you want
    But you’ll never find one…
    Quite like me
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What if I was your missing rib of perfection
    What if I was your only means of completion
    What if I was your sole brush with perfection

    But you choose to cast me a away

    What is she is nothing more than a bone
    What if she harmonizes best with his song
    what if she is completely absolutely wrong

    But you choose to cast me a away

    What happens when you comprehend your mistake
    What happens when another chooses to partake
    Whan happens when you realize what was at stake

    But you choose to cast me a away

    Was definitely filling this one. I couldn't help be add my two cent repsonse. thanks for the inspiration
     
  3. Phenomenon

    Phenomenon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    And I loved your two cents. It was priceless to me :SuN029:
     
  4. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    something to pounder and wonder about through this piece.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel as though you read my thoughts of a time in my life, where I felt this, said this, but not half as well as you expressed this. Gee, feeling this more than I can possibly express poet...
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    NEVER MISS YA WELL TILL IT RUN DAG ON DRY!!!!!!!
    LOLH!!!!!
    This was a really good poem brother Phenom:)
    Flow on
    Something Special will never go forgotten or go alone...
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Phenomenon:
    One persons junk is another persons
    treasure....she just casted you
    to who your really suppose to be with
    This was lovely...


    Much Luv
     
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