Black Poetry : Careful what you wish for...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by StarGoddess, Mar 26, 2003.

  1. StarGoddess

    StarGoddess Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I have lost my freedom of speech...
    no, I mean my freedom with words...
    cause lately I...
    I can't...
    what's the word...
    mobilize...
    my thoughts into verses
    like I used to be able to do.
    I used to love to rhyme...
    yes...
    I used to shine...
    spitting out verses and phrases
    that would make folks just step back and and utter
    daaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyummmmmmm....!!!
    But lately I...
    I stutter over the keys
    and what used to be free
    is now costing me my sanity
    as I can't....
    what's the word...
    project my feelings and thoughts
    into the hearts and souls of others so they can feel what I feel
    and see what I see...
    happines has crippled me...
    turning me into one of those
    shiny happy people
    I used to so despise
    and subjugate with my
    overtly critical...overly sensitve...pessimistic...no...realistic
    point of veiw...
    then came you...
    and I no longer felt the angst and frustration
    of unrequitedness...
    and my used to be vast vocabulary
    has been downsized to
    you...me...love...us...and happy.
    I used to have skills when my mind and time was empty
    but now all is overly occupied
    with thoughts, hopes, and wishes and prayers for you...
    no more room for poetry or stories in my wild imagination...
    because reality has finally caught hold of me
    and I realized that it was time for all the madness and sadness to end.
    So I lost part of me when you found all of me...
    and what I have always loved most about myself
    has left me like I never had it all.
    I used to have freedom of words...verses...of poetry
    but now I am just dumbfounded...
    because it seems like the love I have always yearned for
    has turned into my creative downfall.

    copyright ambroziya snow 2003
    :confused: :confused: :confused: :confused:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis u feel is real and poetic sunshine will come
    da lines u scribe is well felt vibes is a stroke away
    keys of tune in ya ear dis sanity thang will clear
    da path is here
    flow on sho ya dip
    poetry justice in ya script
    com'mo !
    i feel ya i've been in dis place once too
     
  3. Euphoria

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    Great piece.
    I think it rings true for so many poets.
    I know that when I'm sad I write so much better, because the emotion feels as though it runs deeper.
    I wrote vividly when I was suffering from depression, even though I oozed this cool, calm image. But since I found my SO, my writing has changed a lot. Maybe not for the worse, it's just not so dark.
    So maybe you just need to alter your subject and themes, pick happier topics. You'll get your voice back soon enough :)

    *Emma*
     
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    stargoddess!


    ohhh! so that explains where you've been! :lol:
    & don't think you've been here since i stopped
    using the name GA_SunShyne... anywho!

    seriously... i am lovin' this piece. & i can relate
    to your words wholeheartedly. since the "love
    bug" bit me... i haven't written like i used to...
    i tell everyone it's because i'm living a love poem
    instead!! :D but anyway... it's good to see your
    name among the flowing!! :) please stay around!

    alwayspeace&continuedLove,
    elayne.
     
  5. LyrikalShe

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    Well, hon...looks like things are flowin' again to me! Love not unrequited can be one powerful muse. Let it flow.

    Serenity...
    She
     
  6. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it is so good to read you again, gurl. you have been missed, trust that! i agree with sweet sunshyne...stay around. i'm lovin' this piece, as i have loved all of yo scribes.

    ~~~fromoneofyofans~~~
     
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    well...you must have wished for a poetic piece...
    because you got it!

    be careful what u wish for...

    sean.pondering
     
  8. StarGoddess

    StarGoddess Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...and I am humbled...

    ....for the responses and love yall are giving me on what I consider a pitiful comeback....lol

    lister....my sista!! so glad to see you again....show me the way to some of your works...maybe it will replenish my soul...

    elayne...aka GA....hey sunshine!! whats with the alias?!? thank you for beaming your light on me....

    TPS----sweetie....you know i have always been one of your biggest fans....always will be....i am humbled by your acknowledgement...

    Rich...man...you always were good at making folks feel welcome...even us prodigal poets :) thank you

    and lyrikalshe (cool *** name) and euphoria (who could adore a star gazer more than an star goddess?!?) thank you for your thoughtful praise....


    ***gravitating***
    :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss:
     
  9. herlove

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    poet u just on another level ****... explore it .... u lost nothing but gained the source of us all LOVE....... RELAX TEACH YOUR SELF HOW TO MANUVER IT
     
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    StarGoddess Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    *blush*

    thanks for the love herlove
     
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