Black Poetry : Caramel Shell

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  1. Blue

    Blue Active Member MEMBER

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    Caramel Shell
    from my book, Destiny's Theory

    Bright hazel eyes
    dark silky hair
    long smooth legs
    soft slender lips...
    They all adorn her golden reflection
    God must've created her
    from the sands of Egypt
    He must've dipped her body
    in pools of Perfection
    and crafted her face
    from the shape of an angel's reflection.
    But, He lost track of time
    ran out of change
    before He made another dime.
    Looking at her from the Outside
    His creation was truly divine
    but internally she never developed,
    her personality
    always lagged a little behind.
    She's only a caramel shell
    beautifully fragile
    delicate yet incomplete...
    but she works what she has
    she wears her beauty so well,
    for now anyway
    cause her clothing is slowly aging
    gradually fading and becoming worn
    eroding her exterior
    and revealing her true form.
    Ever wonder what will happen
    when she grows old?
    When her body softens
    when her hazel eyes start to darken
    when her face ceases to glow
    and her smile turns cold...?
    What then?
    When the only love she's known,
    "Superficial" leaves her
    and all she's left with is an ugly soul?
    Always remember that looks
    are often deceiving
    and though first impressions are very strong
    they can be misleading.
    So, before you begin
    to look within your heart
    and admire all the fire she inspired
    start to perspire
    take a step back,
    and analyze your newly acquired desire,
    place a small crease
    through your beautiful masterpiece
    ask yourself, "Is she totally complete,
    have all the parts she possesses become whole?"
    and listen to your mind
    more so than your whoremones
    if you honestly want to tell
    whether you have
    just discovered your Queen
    or if you have just uncovered
    another empty shell.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome back home,
    Very Inspiring piece poet, my heart wrote on this one.
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Superficial shells
    Great flow and well written poet.
    Thanks for sharing
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    You betta SPEAK!

    SCHOOL 'EM!

    Whoodie-Hoo!....They thought they had a diamond but it was just zirconium! LOL!
     
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    well well this was awesome you teaching from da depth !
     
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