Black Poetry : Car Ride

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  1. mahoganyqueen

    mahoganyqueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Car Ride

    Three people riding in a car
    Three separate thought waves
    Crashing into a shore
    The same blood courses through all three
    Yet they are as different as the alpha and omega
    For one is the beginning
    Another is the end
    And the last is too frightened to know who she is

    "What movie did you go see?"
    Long silence
    "Pay Check."
    Short answer

    The long silence is used to decipher
    Because the words are dripping with innuedo
    Hidden meanings
    Twists and turns

    "I'm doing my best."
    Long silence
    "It's not good enough."
    Short answer
    That is what's really being said

    No one cares for the movie
    Just the fact that hurt is coating
    The windows of the car
    Because there is a father and
    A daughter
    And another daughter
    With questions for eyes
    And pear shaped bowls full of hurt
    For hearts
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for this drive-in CAR RIDE of every right gone wrong!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!! what a car ride this was
    keep rolling lovin da flow
     
  4. THA HOOKUPMAN

    THA HOOKUPMAN Banned MEMBER

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    flow it poet...part my quivering mind
    with your mere words,
    enchanté, your poem caress
    explosions from volcanos long dead.
    im other words,,,that was some cold assssed shyit ...lol...hookup :thinking:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked the way you painted this scene, it could be part of something larger...is it? Perhaps it could be poet. I was into this.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yo, I am diggin the original flava of this one. :juggle:
     
  7. mahoganyqueen

    mahoganyqueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you poets for all the feedback. :kiss1: from me to you.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    diggin ya flow this was tight laid
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wooord i do love the way you posed this car ride sista
    so much pain
    so much hurt
    so much reality
    you did it sista :) yes you did :)
     
  10. mahoganyqueen

    mahoganyqueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx for the positive feedback mzblkangel and triniti. :hearts2:
     
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