Black Poetry : Can't Think of a Title....any suggestions

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  1. NittyGrit

    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The years say 22
    but my soul speaks with age
    read many of life’s chapters
    and put some ink on the pages
    grew wise in due time
    and got stories for days
    age aint nutt’n but a number
    i don’t believe in that phrase

    fighting battles by yourself
    can be one hell of a war
    heaven aint hard to find
    but its worth fighting for
    my hunger for victory
    keeps me thirsty for more
    i’d bust that ***** up off the hinges
    if they’d just open the door

    experience is a fine teacher
    so i’m sittin’in class
    taking test after test
    trying my hardest to pass
    hard work don’t hurt
    so i’m bustin’ my ***
    the slow grind takes time
    don’t move too fast

    got up out the fast lane
    and slowed down my pace
    the one’s i see movin’ fast
    rarely win the race
    its the ones that stand strong
    and endure to the end
    a strong man will survive
    and i won’t break nor bend

    win i reach the finish line
    lord call my name
    reward me for my effort
    say it wasn’t in vain
    done some wrong in the past
    but i been trying to change
    thank you for the victory
    and the wisdom i gained

    NittyGritt ReddClay (c) 2002
     
  2. Monalisa

    Monalisa Member MEMBER

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    I really like this piece...It is very wise indeed

    Nothing wrong with a piece simply titled, "Untitled"

    BUT one suggestion that I get from it is:
    "My Soul Speaks With Age"

    Just a suggestion, I won't be offended if you're not feelin it;)
     
  3. Monalisa

    Monalisa Member MEMBER

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    P.S...I forgot to shout out the fact that we're both browsing in from the ATL!!!

    Peace fellow resident
     
  4. aqueenpassing

    aqueenpassing Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "NICE"

    Hey my friend,
    this was a reallynice piece what can I say but you have done it again.... Flow on and continue to let the spirit lead you

    :wave: :teach: :wave:
     
  5. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i agree like that title
     
  6. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What doesn't kill us makes us wiser.

    It's nice to see that you're putting your knowledge on top and peacing yourself.

    Like you sed, the ones movin' fast rarely finish the race, let alone win.

    Peace.
     
  7. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well done!

    Wonderful piece...the title will come...it was obviously so profoundly felt when written the confines of one title eluded you momentarily! You spoke from your spirit...Now let your spirit speak to you.
    Blessings on Ya House!
     
  8. NittyGrit

    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you all for the love and suggestions

    i am feelin' "my soul speaks with age"

    NittyGritt ReddClay
     
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