Black Poetry : Can't Take You Back

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MRS. LADY, Dec 8, 2007.

  1. MRS. LADY

    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    You say that your a better man
    You say that you have changed your ways
    You say a second chance
    Will bring us better days

    I say your second chance has passed
    You walked out as I cried
    the time it took to get over you
    Was like walking dead while still alive

    You thought the grass was so much more that green
    You crossed over to the other side
    All chances numb and the thrills now gone
    To me your like someone who has died

    Took all steps to carry on
    Smiled while in pain
    So if you love me like you say you do
    Then please don't speak my name

    To live my life in love with you
    Causes me to lose sight of Who I Am
    So when I say this love is done
    I mean I'm at the point of no return

    Love is pain and pain is love
    Is all that I have learned
    So when you say you hurt with love for me
    All I can say is I understand
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow. You precisely described that devastating hurt, and the choice to love yourself, instead of choosing to be that comfortable stand by. Highest of props to ya.
     
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    ditto to watzinaname. this was well crafted poet and hit the nail right on the head
     
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    Miss Lady......Miss Lady....M I S S Lady

    All I can Say is that is all there is...smh
    :bingo:

    Can we put up with the act of desperation
    Though our act was Based on a true story
    Keep Flowing Ma'am
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep yet true and on point
     
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    definitely enjoyed this peice. thank you!
     
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    Hey Miss Lady
    Love can be painful, and fulfilling to. Sometimes we all have to learn
    And your poem is defining both of these elements. Very nice write.

    Peace~N~Love
     
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    Whew!!! Ya'll are killin' me softly today!!! EXCELLENT FLOW!!!!
     
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    I can feel that...
    He had his run,
    but now he done!

    They sometimes forget that, when they think other grass is greener...
    Our grass looks greener to someone else.
    And all grass looks great from afar.
    Nice piece poet.
     
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    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    thank you all so much.......

    ya'll make me feel right at home here.... :)
     
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