Black Poetry : Candy's Chocolate and a suicide of love

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  1. Mr marion

    Mr marion Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    (This poem is dedicated to my best friend who loved a man so much he lost himself. He later discovered the love from above which is actually an entire chapter of my book)

    Candy's Chocolate

    Always claiming how sweet he is
    How he makes your heart beat like no other man
    Always trying to change him
    claim him
    rearrange him
    make him yours

    All to no avail

    Always giving him another try
    Another surprise
    The things you can’t buy
    someone's love

    Even tattooed his name
    I felt your pain
    with no gain

    All for chocolate

    Even stretched your arms through his chest to claim his heart
    Wasn’t smart
    Candy's chocolate

    Now you’re all grown up
    Found a higher praise
    Wouldn’t give him the time or day
    Don’t' even say " hi" anymore

    Now he feels left out
    You’re all he talks about
    You've been burnt out
    Now he's closed out
    Chocolate missing out
    The way it always works out
    That true love you gave is no longer being handed out
    Now that he chocolate has melted
    candy is sweet with out it
     
  2. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm diggin this deeply...
    well done
    -7:spinstar:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sometime we get lost in da love
    which we wish to have and do it our
    way but lose the truth i feel dis here
    speak on!
     
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    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Marion

    whoa
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mr. Marion

    Touching piece here!
    Well written scribe...

    N2
     
  6. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mr M.


    i read this one days ago... but! due to a lil 'puter
    problem... i couldn't respond. i'm glad i still have
    the chance to tell you that this was wonderful work!
    & i most def was feelin' da vibes risin' of da page!

    keep doin' what you do... & i'll keep readin'! :)

    :heart:
    Elayne.
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you're eloquent and beyond...your style is classic "YOU"...I love your "voice", and the sensitivity that leaps out of the very texture of your phrases....

    I think what I'm saying is I love your work! :)

    a
     
  8. Mr marion

    Mr marion Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks so much

    I thank all of you for the read a response. It keeps me inspired. I have begin to fufill a dream. I'm headed to NY soon to make things happen.
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mr. M...

    Very kewl piece...

    :peace:
    GQ
     
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