Black Poetry : Candy Rain

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  1. Tha-Emissary

    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rumors said it was loving premeditated
    So maybe somehow somebody knew
    It was long days and simmering nights
    Spent in the pitch-black confinements of solitary
    Thinking about what I’d do to her
    It was what I feed on, what I dreamt about
    How to hit the couchie just right without leaving a blood trail
    How to scour her body and get away with three counts of manslaughter
    From years of close observation I knew her routine
    Like the scars on my hands and face
    Knew without a doubt, I’d catch her in the shower
    The surprise coming from around the back
    Her towel dropping as if it were the closing curtain on the last act of a well-staged play
    However this wasn’t the renowned Swan Lake she’d dreamed of
    Perhaps it was more or less the Beauty and the Beast because
    I’d have to drag her just to get her to the bed
    Have to use feather to prod my cutting path so as not to leave fingerprints
    The weapon of choice nothing more than a hook
    Nothing blunt
    Just the crook of my finger
    That’s what I’d jab into her over and over again
    Letting pure enjoyment come from watching her squirm like an earthworm,
    Yet unlike the fisherman, I wouldn’t cast her away
    Instead I’d reel her in
    Pull her close, by her vagina close into my abdomen for the deathblow
    In the end it would all be the perfect murder
    She’d be sprawled across the mattress, soaked
    Eyes rolled in the back of her head and
    The DA would think it was a copycat murder
    Another Candyman
    However, he’d be wrong with all the rest
    Because my calling card wasn’t the bees, nor the sting of love
    Rather it was the love without the pain
    And I of course I was not their Candyman
    Because tears left running on her cheeks spelt out
    Candy Rain.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was a great flow & read ....poet
     
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    A mystery worth dying for... you write well.
     
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    wow what a read. Got to love your poetic skills
     
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    Wow, your words strategically seduce the reader into surrender. Poet of the week, this was awesome!
     
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    This was an excellent execution of words. Very good piece!
     
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    :welldone: I had to read this again to make sure I was reading what I thought I was. :uhh: It really is a great poem, just a little shocking! But shocking is good! I bet you'd make a great short story author too!
     
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    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks to all the fam at destee for all the love. I preciate all the comments peeps!
     
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    most welcome as u continue poeticly .....
     
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    Nice show Candy Rain.
     
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