Black Poetry : Can You?

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by true love, Aug 29, 2003.

  1. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As you blow
    Your horn at me
    While I'm pumping gas
    Into an empty tank
    So my kids can go to school
    Yeah
    5 Dollar
    Is all
    While you try to holla
    Can you
    Even begin to understand
    That I'm trying to make up the difference
    For a pitiful man
    That don't know how to handle his biz
    Feed and clothe his kids
    Can you
    See
    As I work so fervently
    You walk by
    Trying to catch my eye
    That this job
    Has to pay every single bill
    And sometimes I just flip at will
    Cause the pressure is so great
    Can you see
    As i stand in line at the grocery store
    Hoping and praying
    This stuff don't cost more
    Than what I bargained for
    And it will last
    As you stare at my a**
    That I'm a mother
    A sister
    A daughter
    Before I'm your lover
    Can't you see
    That I'm crazy
    But not crazy in love
    So don't waste your time
    Unless you can see
    There's so much more to me
    Than pretty brown eyes
    Sexy thighs
    44D breast
    And a butt that won't rest
    Can You?
    :confused:
     
  2. A007

    A007 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well.....I kinda doubt it sistah....that is.....unless the brothas are enlightened one's like the brothas here on Destee.....and even we my be TEMPORARILY blinded by the booty and/or the 44d's.
    That was truly a blessing to read because I am sure I am not the only man that needed to read that.

    Great flow, Powerful words, incredible message. :jumping: :jumping:
     
  3. Jazz4u

    Jazz4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    well said...j.
     
  4. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks so much for the love. thanks for feeling my message
     
  5. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    True - again speaks truth. Remember the next time I cut my eyes at you I am probably having the same day you are.
     
  6. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol, i'll really keep that in mind
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Girl.........this was off the charts.......

    Conscious message mixed with maaaad writing skill
    This would make even the most difficult of man
    think...yes...think

    Excellent piece!
     
  8. gayluv

    gayluv Active Member MEMBER

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    Girrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrl!!!!!!

    If you didn't say it!

    If you didn't say it!

    Your words captured so many womens feelings! Excellent flo!:x:
     
  9. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    angelicsage, gayluv thank you so much for the love. i'm so happy to know i'm not the only one that feels this way