Black Poetry : can you SEE happiness {in my sadness} {LONG VERSION}

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  1. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sadness surrounds my joy

    April showers brought
    May flowers
    And great joy
    ‘til the last hour
    I held you

    Now…
    Saturated pores
    Secretes the stench of
    Unhappiness
    F
    l
    o
    o
    d
    i
    n
    g
    The left and right ventricles
    Of a lonely
    Heart.

    There is no
    C
    ..o
    ….a
    ……g
    ……..u
    ……….l
    …………a
    …………...t
    …………….e
    To slow the rush of
    Life force
    Escaping me
    …Ingesting me
    With torrents of despair

    There are no stimuli great enough
    To excite this worn heart
    Suffering a happiness attack

    Yes…
    Sadness surrounds my joy
    Poised…I am
    As contentment stands
    Suicide watch

    There I was
    Admiring the
    4 X 12 feet box
    By which I stood
    Signifying the NOGOODness
    Germinating like a
    Yeast infection
    …Festering
    In the bowels of
    “Can we be….”

    Wishful thinking is
    Killing me.

    I lie here…alone

    A reflection of
    Broken promises
    And misguided fantasies
    That never became reality
    And all the lies
    You tried to run past me
    Hoping I wouldn’t see
    The DECEPTIVE YOU
    Lying beside me

    Can you see happiness {in my sadness}

    Sparkling shadows
    Hide the loneliness of weary eyes
    With yesterday’s smile
    Etched across my face

    Traces of tear stained pathways
    Adorn cheek’s solemn
    Highway
    Disguised by winter’s
    Rainfall

    Can you see happiness {in my sadness}

    Hidden by hopeful dreams
    Of wishful things
    Like, SOMEday
    You may come To bE.

    Can you see
    Happiness
    {in my sadness}
     
  2. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I see happiness in your sadness...

    I hear happiness in your sadness, even weeping is a song, a longing for what we imagine what was offered...
    what
    went
    wrong?
    Yes I hear, happiness in sadness, between , missed heartbeats and late night rendevous, I hear you when you tip up the stair way and slip off your shoes. I am happiness waiting to embrace you just as you are. Hoping that if I bear witness, your sinful ways you will toss off far...I love you the way that you are...God help me!
    You still love them the way that they are!

    Blessings On Ya House!
     
  3. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There are no stimuli great enough
    To excite this worn heart

    like that line.....

    this is a real good piece

    very emotional and heartfelt

    always wanted to write a poem with this type of structrue

    fun to read..........

    got real good twords the end

    Keep it up
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Baller i feel dis here deeper then one know
    yet i know happiness near
    man open eyes !
     
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    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    left over pieces off my heart .....can feel this poem
    the emotion..the words the story.......
    as if its mine.....
    feldthis one baller
     
  6. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    msluciousb...

    there is weeping in my sorrow...but tomorrow is a better day. catch me after i've captured the missed heartbeats that caused my weeping...'til you embraced me.

    THANKS for seeing me.

    1poet/$$RICH$$...THANKS for the love

    libertylaida...hmmm...the "left over pieces of my heart" eh. i'm happy you have so much heart that there are pieces left over...keep smiling and continue to love.

    one.
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hmm, I found this piece quite interesting...a different angle, a different perspective...keep flowing.
     
  8. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANK'S Reddy.

    love&manyblessings
     
  9. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    still searching...

    ...the flooded hills...and sea side sands...wondering if i can...find the happiness in my sadness.

    meditating.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    OH MY GOODNESS!

    I wish I could just HUG you right now for this!

    THIS IS A MASTERPIECE!


    I loved the whole but the bolded parts are my favorites!...They struck me in a DEEP place!
     
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