Quiet Poetry Lounge : Can you look me in my eyes?

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by nevar, Jan 21, 2007.

  1. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can you for a moment stare at my picture and say?
    You never loved me

    Can you for a moment look into my eyes and say?
    You never cared

    Can you for a moment whisper into my ears and say?
    You never needed me

    The reason why you cant is because your lips can't utter such a lie
    And the pain that you feel as you cry a silent cry

    I wish I could see the tears that stain your salted face
    And I wish that in time our familiar smile would take place

    Upon the same face I would trace my fingers upon
    As my fingers play upon you like a song
    My tongue

    Has said things that cuts deep, deeper than a knife
    I was just so focused on becoming your wife

    That I forgot about the way I down you
    How I constantly went against you
    Because I wanted it to go my way
    Didn't want to hear what you had to say

    It was all about me, me, me, me
    Never about you, you, you, you

    But I see that I was wrong and need for you to understand
    It was never in my plans

    To see you walk out to never return
    Your stinging words linger in my mind how they burn
    If I could turn

    Back the clock I would go back to the day I pushed you
    away, away, away
    From me
    But now I see

    That time isn't on my side
    I confide

    To my friends but I'm just material to talk about
    While they have there heads up in the clouds
    Making love sounds

    As I stare at my empty walls that use to conceal our sounds of

    Laughter

    Sounds of

    Making Love

    Sounds of

    Our pain

    And I put my ear to the wall to see if they could talk to comfort me
    So I can hold on to what we use to share
    The lonliness, the emptiness I can't bare

    If I had the chance to see you again

    Could you look me in the eyes to say?

    You never loved me..........


    Copyright 2007
    Nevar​
     
  2. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow

    Good Morning Sunshine.
    I just woke up and what a flow of truth this piece offers.

    This flow has what could be the vail between true happiness or defeat in finding love.

    The key is speaking on what you want and need and listening to what is said.
    Then feeding back not only a reply or more questions, but being able to go deep into the other and pull out of what wasn't said to help understand.

    I love this flow Nevar.. it is great.:spin:
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You really got to me. I liked the whole piece, but these lines particularly struck me:

    "As I stare at my empty walls that use to conceal our sounds of

    Laughter

    Sounds of

    Making Love

    Sounds of

    Our pain

    And I put my ear to the wall to see if they could talk to comfort me
    So I can hold on to what we use to share
    The lonliness, the emptiness I can't bare"

    We all make mistakes, sometimes a relationship is salvageable, and sometimes, it is a lesson for the next go round. Your word choice was excellent. Kudos.
     
  4. robboy2003

    robboy2003 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I loved it sista! I'm not going to even go there,if you had to go thru something to bring it out.

    It was a great write!:great: :welldone:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I can't lie i will not lie
    because when i look deep in ya eyes
    i see da cares , da needs and warmth
    from a heart i love so much
    so no i can't !!!!!!
     
  6. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks to all that have showed me love on this piece. thanks again!
     
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