Black Poetry : Can U feel my pain

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  1. innerbeauty

    innerbeauty Member MEMBER

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    Once again I lie here spirtually confused,
    Mind Scrambling,
    Emotions Rambling,
    On the pain of feeling used

    Temptation taps me on the shoulder,
    Where I'll end up when this is over
    Learning hurts as I get older,
    How the world seems to get much colder,

    Can U feel my pain

    Writing poetry on how to survive
    Through the storms, many nights i cried
    Holding no more feeling inside
    Has somehow slowly damaged innocent pride

    Waking up to tears on a pillow
    Not knowing how deep the pain will go
    Just preparing myself for the sorrow
    Thats waiting for me tomorrow

    Can U feel my pain

    When a prayer in the night goes without action
    I've learned the dissatisfaction
    With hopes no longer addition but subtraction
    When theres an everyday distraction
    That always keeps you down

    Can you feel my pain

    A smile seems so far away you look at me all you see is this face
    What about the little girl who used to live in this place
    Her innocence lost without a trace
    Being referred to as just a sad case

    Depression
    like
    An Obsession

    When there is less of a blessing
    It just has me confused and guessing

    Where is he,

    Can U really feel me
     
  2. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome InnerBeauty

    This was a deep piece. Thanks for sharing it with us. All answers come with time. I learn something each and every day.
     
  3. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I do indeed feel ya, and no doubt others will too. You're not alone. This was so well-written.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I can feel you, as I know others will too. Yes, there are storms, but thank goodness for the sunshine. Emotively written piece.
     
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    i felt all of u on dis indeed and i also
    see da sunshime and hope keep flowing
     
  6. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can U Feel My Pain

    Time moves so slowly
    when my heart is dying fast
    Never knowing when it ends
    How long will my pain last?

    Can U Feel My Pain

    All my tears they seem to sink
    right to the depths of my heart
    Calling for you
    Yearning for you
    when I know we've grown apart


    Can U Feel My Pain

    Using this pen to release my pain
    yet never feeling complete
    Regaining my senses
    Mending my heart
    Both two difficult feats

    Can U Feel My Pain

    ~Mona


    I loved this piece
    It really touched me
     
  7. Legacy21

    Legacy21 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Inner Beauty, I can definitely identify with this piece - filled with so many emotions, reaching out for answers, dissatisfied and despairing. Yes, those unanswered prayers so dissappointing. Repressing feelings leaving you hurting and empty inside. But sister there is hope as I discovered. Be encouraged and don't let your spirit be broken.

    Peace and Love,
    Legacy
     
  8. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome inner beauty :grouphug: i felt ya my sista and I am glad you came home to share it with us :grouphug:

    p.s. monda...smooth add on my sista :)
     
  9. innerbeauty

    innerbeauty Member MEMBER

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    Thankyou to all of you for your understanding, i feel blessed to have words of encouragement. Peace to you all
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i can feel your pain..


    feeling you
    feel your pain
    touching us
     
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