Black Poetry : Can I share my story? Can I share my pain?

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Nov 23, 2003.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It was October 5th
    I remember it lke it was yesterday
    When this woman, beautiful woman
    blew my mind away
    she has the look, she has the smile
    she's got the mind, she's got the style
    we would talk everyday
    expressing our feelings
    But I could tell by what she did n didnt say
    that she was still dealing
    with past confrontations
    that she was still tryna destroy
    So I didnt judge her, no
    I just simply tried to avoid
    saying something too good or something soo wrong
    I tried to be myself
    i tried to prove to her
    that I had my mind on her n nobody else
    But now when I call her
    she never answers the phone
    And when I email her
    she never seems to respond
    Im so confused because she told meshe liked me
    But I dont feel my time was wasted
    But she could have at least left me
    with some type of explanation

    I just wish that somehow or someway I could show her
    Im not tryna game her, I just wanna get to know her
    wish that somehow or someway I could reach her
    to tell her that I need her
    grace, her openminded personality, her maturity
    But its like when I find someone with the potential... it never seems to work for me

    She told me she is still tryna find herself
    But im tryna find her too
    And I try to let her go
    But my mind always travels to
    that night when I looked into her eyes
    and she stared right back into mine
    And I knew it was something special
    Because I never looked someone in the eye
    until that very 1st time
    If we give it a chance and it never works out
    thats completely fyne with me
    But I cant let go of something
    that was never given the opportunity
    It kind if hurts because I gave her a lot of me
    to prove Im not like anything she's ever had
    But she refusaes to listen to me sing my song
    she just wont gimme a chance

    And I just wish that somehow or someway I could show her
    Im not tryna game her, I just wanna get to know her
    wish that somehow or someway I could reach her
    to tell her that I need her
    grace, her openminded personality, her maturity
    But its like EVERYtime I find someone with the potential... it never seems to work for me

    I wish that somehow or someway she could gimme a chance or an explanation...
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh wow this was posed so well...
    i enjoyed the read...thanks for sharing...:angel1:
     
  3. gempis

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    ah, baby girl. This resonates with me so completely. Story of my life, both in friendship and in love. It hurts so badly.

    You expressed this so very well - you have such a great style. Love the part about looking into someone's eyes for the first time, and the line about "it never seems to work for me."

    If you weren't the strongest young woman I know, I'd worry about ya. But since you are made of so much fortitude and iron fibers, Ima just give you props and remind ya of what ya already know: keep ya head up.

    Much love, sweetie.
     
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    I truly felt your story and I'm so thankful that you shared it.

    Eventually, you'll have your chance.
     
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    this was well felt and surely she will
    sooner then one think .....she feel da depth
    of it and the emotions is up ready to speak
    tyte scribe here wow!!
     
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    you really release
    alot in this flow
    much love to you
    my strong sister
    let the flow pour
    Peace
     
  7. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aww thanks yall!!

    I hope she comes around. I mean, I really like this girl... its a sad story. much love n respect...
     
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    :jawdrop: dayuuuuuuum gal! i love this! im goin thru the saaame exact situation right now. I love ur style and i love ur flow,
    so keep on writtin and let ur poem stack grow.
    n if she left u like that out in da cold, afraid of bein hurt,
    maybe u can mail her this poem? and see if that would work???
    ..... much luv mama
     
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    word....
    this was tyte...
    keep da pen on alert
    and da mind on insert....
    peace
    khasm
     
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    Feeling you on this here. Sometimes it's like a drive by love. Only here never to be seen again. Your left on the streets wondering around looking for that again. That one who done it. Who was that.


    You can only take comfort that they came your way. Spent time with you. Meaning everything that was said. but not able to stop because the journey and discovery hasn't ended.

    I often hear people say. I spent this time and that time with him, her.. but if not with them. You would spend it anyway. So nothings lost. I learned that as travelors move into and around in your time and space. Get what they brought to the table. Take the lesson learned. Sift what was positive and meant for you and move on. It's baggage.. put it in the trunk of your mind. When you see them again. Show them the goods. The positive portions. If they like what they brought then they will like it again. This two lane highway.. them going north and you south.. sometimes you collide. Take that number and info and file it. Love don't live here anymore. Not at this time. Vacancy
     
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