Black Poetry : Caged

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Jan 12, 2005.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Incarcerated,
    By the thoughts,
    I think.
    Constantly throwing me back,
    Into the clink.
    Mind messages,
    Reminding me,
    About what it is I lack,
    Keeping me confined.
    At times I thought I was free,
    But it’s like someone pressed rewind,
    No progression, but regression.
    It left an impression that I belonged,
    Back into the broken state of mind,
    Depression…
    Imprisoned in the ways of my heart,
    In which I don’t even know,
    As the enemy’s voice tries to form,
    My shackles upon my feet,
    Within my eyes, the liquid mist,
    The manacles upon my wrist.

    But there is a voice,
    In which concrete, steel,
    Ways in which you ‘think’ you feel,
    Can’t ever stand…
    I hear it!
    I feel it,
    The shaking of the ground,
    I see it,
    The crumbling of the walls,
    My bondage as it unlocks and falls,
    The light of day,
    Which was concealed by,
    My own feelings, my own resolutions,
    Outcomes, conclusions….
    Freedom, liberty,
    From myself,
    From me…
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a heartfelt poem...written with so much emotion...loved it
     
  3. 1poetsought

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    Chasity, Girl... how liberating it is to experince you!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow !!
    da depth of emotions that flow here as i read u
    very tyte scribe sis....
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You can feel the escape in this piece, a liberating feeling as the inner you breaks out. Such a freeing vibe.
     
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    Completely feel this.

    Nice.
     
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    dang i was flowing wit every word and written emotion-
     
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    Chastity, once again let me say that you write way beyond your years. This piece is so dope.
     
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