Black Poetry : Cacti people

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  1. mizjoice

    mizjoice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We are the cacti people

    In the midst of the desert, we thrive:
    growing against will and circumstance,
    while everything around us dies.

    We resist the oasis:
    things that promise much,
    but deliver nothing.

    The cacti people
    are prickly to the touch,
    sensitive.
    handle us wrong,
    and we will hurt you,
    leaving you with a thorn or two
    to deal with.

    The cacti people
    are juicy
    inside,
    where the norishment is.

    Ever notice that
    the life inside us is always
    the thing that manages to substain us?

    We are the cacti people:

    Look closely,
    and you will see
    the blossoms produced
    from the tops of our heads.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    I AM SO GLAD YOU FOUND YOUR POETRY!


    This piece is so succinctly descriptive!


    And THIS part was the best for me:

    Now, that THERE was IT!

    You really know how to capture the essence of a concept!
     
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    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    very deep


    also tragic if you will...

    an oasis provides fertility and H20.. cactus self nourishing, un-concerned that all life around it not existent .... if life is not shared then there is nothin which can look closely... selfish... IMHO...

    your poem is well scribed and appreciated.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoa felt this deeply within me sis....
     
  5. mizjoice

    mizjoice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cherry Blossom and Rich, thanks y'all!

    Miss Lady, thanks for taking that deeper look.....an oasis provides no norishment....or fertility or H2O. An oasis looks like a blessing in a desert...ahhhh, water! (Now I will drink!) But when you get there, it's an illusion, there's nothing there! Sometimes, to grow up untainted, you must be selfish with your dreams, aspirations.......yourself. Sometimes you have to norish yourself until you produce blossoms from your head (ideas, beauty, new growth) Sometimes, if you aren't selfish with yourself, you risk becoming just like the rest of your environment........dust.
     
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    O, the depth of this

    ...leaves me wanting more. however, your reference points are a little off. Miss Lady is right in her assessment of an oasis. you might be refering to a mirage, instead. PLEASE, don't think me offensive. ENLIGHTENMENT is golden.

    peace&manyblessings.

    the river floweth
     
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    mizjoice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey, baller, no offence taken.....both of y'all are right. I thought about it all day after I posted back to Ms Lady (meant to get back, but didn't!) Y'all see something looking crazy, call me on it, please!!!!......Mirage it should be.....and I guess in my next revision, I will change that. Baller, and Ms Lady, thanks for taking the time to read, and for paying close attention.......
     
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    Oh goodness....

    Joice done did it. I enjoyed this from start to finish.

    Soothing words, laced with a hint of sorrow.

    One.

    - Ikoro
     
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    Can't sleep on this.

    One,

    - Ikoro