Black Poetry : By Way of The Stars

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MapleXtract, Dec 10, 2001.

  1. MapleXtract

    MapleXtract Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    (I wrote this one years ago, but just recently 'fixed it up')...


    Fly, with me,
    to my rendition of paradise;
    through the shortcut
    by way of the stars.
    Conquer love,
    with maximum levels
    of eternal life,
    'stuck' behind its invisible bars.
    While taking
    the occasional swig of opportunity
    (I prefer mine with a twist of lime
    and 'on the rocks'),
    the trick is to avoid
    getting intoxicated enough to be
    unavailable for answering it's knocks.
    Travel, with me,
    to 'the heart of the matter'
    in the back seats
    of space's most expensive cars;
    through the shortcut
    by way of the stars.
    The man who has loved greatly
    -sadly-
    will, seldom, love as well again.
    A chance
    for romance
    may come with each passing day;
    what is irreplaceable,
    is a trustworthy friend.
    Drift, with civilization and I,
    up to grab the nearest star.
    The all-to-attentive pessimist
    is unable to grasp
    because -in reality-
    he's drifted too far.
     
  2. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    interesting...

    "The man who has loved greatly
    -sadly-
    will, seldom, love as well again."

    could it be that he poured so much of himself into the first...that he's afraid of getting hurt again?

    or, maybe, he becomes so intolerant of women--the idiosyncrasies of women--that he can't see himself going so deep into another for fear of hating her...or, himself.

    either way, i'd welcome the opportunity to fly with you.:)

    there's a certain star i would like to visit, anyway.


    NICE FLOW.
     
  3. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    MapleX

    nice to see ya

    is this sad love story?
    why the drift?
    can it be resolved?
    you know

    DSSNY

    PEACE
     
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    Maple...

    an arresting flow.....
    I like how you did this....

    Epiphany :heart:
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Maple

    Your rendition of paradise... By way of the stars, Howeva you gotta get there ma, get there!

    Madd Respect
    Reas
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa!!!

    this is poetry in "notion"..

    lovin' it.
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes!!!!

    Still all "maplely" I see!!!! Great flowin' to the stars MX!!!!

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    BRAVO !!!!

    I enjoyed this #1 - as the man who loved great, once
    #2 - as a Pisces who tries NOT
    to be too attentive and stays
    dreamy to fend off reality !


    I loved this, so visual and vivid -
    " backseat of space's most expensive cars " --

    this extraction is smooth yo.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    maple~X

    lovin the galaxy glory of cosmos
    wit a sad love story in motion here.....
     
  10. NittyGrit

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    "...what is irreplaceable is a trustworthy friend...
    seems to me you've found companionship in your creative pen

    very creative
    NittyGrit
     
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