Quiet Poetry Lounge : butterfly

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by TotalView, Jul 23, 2011.

  1. TotalView

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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautifully written love the flava it spin off like a song.
     
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    i get it...its like Song of Solomon in the Bible. There is vivid imagery and connotations that maintain a semi-creative tone, but behind the veil express a sincere yearning for an erotic adventure.

    Stanza #2 was my favorite:

    two shades darker i soar
    bareback on butterfly
    the stars riding my hips
    my moves punching through clouds
    moonbeams tonguing their light
    on my african sway

    Magical...
     
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    Thank you, precious. I thought of it as a song when I wrote it. Love my butterfly
    (smile)
     
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    Brother Poet NittyGrit,

    "i get it" Yes, you do...to my surprise. You know...in all the years I have been posting around the internet...you are the first person to my recollection who took the time to let me know that they realize there is more to my poetry than just imagery. You amaze me. Thank you for taking the time and patience to well...read and truly try to understand my work. I appreciate it more than you know. (smile)
     
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    mesmerizing...
     
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    Sister Poet alyce,

    I'm going to admit this piece is growing on me. So great hearing from you. Thank you! (smile)