Black Poetry : butterfly

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by kaly, May 10, 2003.

  1. kaly

    kaly Member MEMBER

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    her wings were open
    she stood there hopin
    one day she would fly again
    but untill then
    she stood grounded
    astounded
    at this cold cold world
    a beautiful butterfly a lost little girl

    I opened my ear
    she cried to me with no fear
    afraid to let her tears show
    I knew there was something she wanted me to know
    a secret about the past a secret going on right now
    I wanted to mend her broken wings but i wasn't sure how

    her eyes sing the blues
    release hidden news
    her heart obtains
    remains secret
    her pain leaves her naked
    unable to trust
    afraid of love
    she only knows about lust

    poetry flows through the colors of her wings it seems
    she dreams
    of the day she will soar like an eagle
    leave these people
    that kidnapp
    intrapp her
    too many people have thrown her in jars
    not allowing her to go too far
    not really knowing who they are
    but allowing them to get close
    now she knows
    the ones who hurt you are the ones who love you the most
     
  2. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave:Hi Kaly...Welcome To Destee's Place...Home For Hundreds Of Poets:wave:

    Your poetry is very insightful. We have a lot of butterflies in the world and like you, I wrote about them just two months about. Their situation is sad, but hopefully through poetry, we can incite people to be more sensitive to their situation in life. Thanks for sharing.



    Joyce :wave:
     
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    nice kaly. beautiful
     
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    poetry flows through the colors of her wings it seems
    she dreams
    of the day she will soar like an eagle
    leave these people
    that kidnapp
    intrapp her

    that was my fav part

    this is a really heartfelt piece...i'll be honest with you....i hated the colors...but thats just me...piece flowed well and had some really nice stuff in it..end was also very nice

    keep it up....and welcome
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    kaly

    I loved it....

    You're fast becoming one of my favorites on here. You should seriously think about coming into voice chat and reading for us...sharing your flow...your passion. We'd love to hear you.

    :thanks: for sharing

    :toast:
     
  6. LibertyLady

    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ok.......feel this..




    i think my heart was in my troat when i read it....
     
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    very tyte poem........keep writin...much love :)
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kaly

    Love the way you dropped this hea!

    Reas
     
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