Poetry Critiques : But what about the children?

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  1. PoeticLove554

    PoeticLove554 Member MEMBER

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    The Children
    But what about the children. That’s what everyone says after the deed has been done. After all the anger and hurt has already been in place they stop and think of the damaged goods that are left behind. They wonder what is left after hurricane hate has left and with it all the innocence. They wonder what has happened to God’s little angels who now act like the devil’s advocate. But they don’t seem to realize that it’s no ones fault but they’re own. They chose to show more anger instead of understanding. Because of course the quick solution always seems like the best solution when in realty they are only creating more destruction. Killing every ounce of hope that used to run freely through the veins of little ones. Breaking the hearts of ones too small to understand that it’s not they’re fault and that it was never about them. But then again maybe that’s the problem. These little beings of perfection were never part of the equation until after the problem was complete. It was never about them yet everyone sits and wonders why wrist that once held veins full of hope now look like checker boards. They sit and wonder why although these cuts may heal the mental ones never will. Photographic memories will always flip back to angry scenes. The amazing brilliance of one destined for greatness will never be known because of one night of sorrow. But instead of looking in the mirror for an answer it’s easier to point the finger, to place the blame on anyone, as long as your not to blame. Only problem is they are the only ones to blame. For their little bundle of joy needed them. Their little bundle of hope depended on them. They forget it’s their little bundle of happiness that was let down. They forget that they are the ones who turned sunny days of happiness and hope into the darkest nights of despair and confusion. They forget that it was always, is always, and should always be about the children.

    -Please comment, i appreciate it already
    Peace n Love
    Morgan
     
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    The reality realistic of this write is indeed tyte and on point well displayed
    to reach da minds of the reader.......
     
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    Something that should be common knowledge, basic instinct really. The children are the future, they are precious and deserve our foremost consideration. Your words definitely make the reader pay attention.
     
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    sho ya right watz
     
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    co-sign

    do em right..... and then they won't break and won't need to be fixed....

    I'm loving this right here......
     
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    Hi PoeticLove554
    Wonderful write indeed.
    What I like most about your drop is that you
    Brought to US the effect of negative reaction
    Place upon the children.
    And also the fact that they are indeed little
    Ones, who have to be taught, they are not animals
    Where instinct kicks in.
    It is wonderful and very well noted
    How you explain to US that they
    are God little angels. This in turn
    do make them special You also
    teaching the responsibility we have
    Bringing our children up like protecting,
    and providing for them

    Very well done

    Peace~N~Love
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sister Morgan
    I appreciate you....
    Seeing not only negatives that plague young children
    But it is obvious that you know of the wonders that can be
    Beautiful and True write
    Please Continue...
     
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    Say It Again...

    THE TRUTH IS SPOKEN HERE

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