Black Poetry : Burden...

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  1. baglady

    baglady Member MEMBER

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    Went to Mr. K's office two weeks ago...
    talked to him about life
    and how my feelings flow..
    feelings of despondency,
    rejection,
    anger,
    and pernicious misdirection.
    How it seems i've been a burden on everyone
    a difficulty
    a hinderance
    a load
    it is just rediculous...
    im a deadweight...
    maybe thats it..
    maybe im better off dead..
    I mean..
    nobody will notice,
    if i take a few pills..
    lie on my bed
    and wait to be breathless..
    cadaverous
    departed
    erased...
    expired
    extinct
    lifeless
    no longer in this place....
    I often wonder
    if anyone would actually miss me
    but i dont think so..nah..not really...
    i mean, theres steve, but he's wrapped up in kyle..
    theres ricky, ya he probably will for a sec.
    theres bryant..o no, not bryant...
    he just told me he didnt want to be my friend...
    There Mr. Rotunno and Mr. K,
    ya i know they'd care...
    those two are the greatest.
    they've always been there...
    i could just write about them..
    forever on end...
    They are a blessing in my life
    I know that for a fact
    I even dreamed my husband
    would be like them....
    kind
    compassionate
    forbearing
    and understanding..
    sensitive
    patient
    tolerant
    and forgiving....
    But i'll probably never know
    what my husband could have been
    or what life i would have lead.
    what things i could have seen...
    what dreams i could have dreamed...
    My moms having another baby.
    she said im haing a little sister..
    I think twice about suicide
    because i dont want that to be my example..
    but my brother hasnt shown me much
    hes hardly ever around
    i've taken seven pills now
    im kinda gettin' drowsy
    my stomach kind of hurts
    and so does my right knee..
    I think i should go lay down now
    the time is coming fast
    i didnt know it would end this way
    but i knew it wouldnt last...
    to all my friends who really cared
    im sorry i had to go
    i hope i didnt hurt you
    and ill watch you
    from above or below....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling the sad tales of this heart felt scribe
     
  3. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    such a sad story sistah...this is the reality of too many people across and outside of the U.S
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A sad tale indeed. And unfortunately a permanent solution to a possibly temporary problem. You've shined a light on something that far too many young peoeple contemplate.
     
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    Virgil Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I loved that you kept it this one real. We all love happy endings, but sad endings are apart of life. Great piece.
     
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