Black Poetry : Buh- Bye

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Sep 21, 2004.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's never been my motive
    to just let go of
    what we built and finally gotta hold of
    But I gave u many chances
    that you took for granted
    Now these girls got more of me walkin 'round on campus
    What you were lackin'
    I put back in
    But you forgot for every action there comes a reaction
    I worshipped you
    worked for me and worked for you
    But now Ive closed the door and my curtain too
    You needed my support
    So I was there to escort
    But you could careless about what I did on n off the court
    I wiped your tears
    would battle your problems and fight your fears
    And when I needed you the most you tried to disappear
    But now you want me back
    But sh*t dont work like that
    Its plain and simple ma, what we had- its a wrap
    It makes no sense to try
    Ive already made up my mind
    "You are the weakest link - Goodbye!"
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Saying goodbye to a love is always difficult. The way you ended this piece was very clever, and it showed a strength within. Flow on.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sometime we have to wave bye even if it's hard to let go
    this was well said and on point ! da weakest link ! GOODBYE !
     
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    Wow, sweetie. Well, looks like you made a decision, huh? You're a strong young woman. I dig the wit and the playful vibe of this.
     
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    That was so tight cant even pick a favotire part!
     
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    BYE BYE
    Your the weakest link!!!!!
    Ouch!!!!
    I like
     
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    See Ya
    Its crazy never see what they have until its gone
    Hot flow poet-Yes loving that Weakest Link
    Nice wrap up Poet
     
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    hmmmm..... soundz like an east coast vibe cumin off real strong ... break us off some more of dat, will u please? hee hee, thanks bruh! one up man... this piece speaks real... so yep yep... loved it mos def... thanks for this piece man, D.S.