Black Poetry : Brothers, don't do it.

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  1. YeshuJah

    YeshuJah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I know a lot of sisters ain't gonna like this,
    but the truth is the truth,
    that's just how it is.

    This one goes out to brothers
    fencing sisters with kids-

    Scene 1
    I met her and she was fine.
    ****!
    looked better than brand new
    minted dimes-
    no ring & no brother loafing-
    she was hot!

    I felt her like
    soft rain and daffodils in spring.

    As a matter of course & compelled
    by the force I introduced myself;
    told her if she'd be my Queen
    I'd damned sure be her King
    we could do this thing-
    as a matter of fact,-
    I suggested we skip the ********,
    go straight to the ring.
    She smiled, said 'I got 2 kids-'

    I hesitated for a millisecond
    then threw my bid in.

    Scene 2-
    We walked up the aisle,
    had lots of fun for a while,
    bought the house and the nice cars;
    sexed each other like crazy mad everyday!
    our attraction was instant and without delay-
    then the ******** started.

    Her kids daddies, she gots 2 of those,
    stopped supporting them.
    I guess they felt since I had the cheese
    I could handle they biz;
    for her part she refuses to get
    into the whole child support racket;
    decided that she'd rather do what it takes
    so now my whack time is down to ****!

    For my part I refuse to front any more cash
    for responsibilities that ain't mine-
    Hell, I was already doing more than
    my share of time.
    We argued, cussed and fought for months about it-
    'till she decided that she'd rather
    work double time, overtime
    & every other time inbetween
    so she don't have to put up with trifling ni**ers.
    Go figure.

    Now instead of being a king with a queen
    I'm down to choking my chicken
    on empty midnight scenes-

    I should get the fu** out of dodge right?
    Right.

    Scene 3
    Between scenes 1 & 2 my ability
    to just pack up and go was born,
    now my love for her is the cross I bear
    while I swallow my inner scorn
    and wish I'd just hit the ***** and run,-
    I tried to do the right thing,
    now I'm under the gun.

    Brothers, don't do it.
     
  2. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    YeshuJah...

    Respectin' your mental flow on this piece!!!

    Where ya been bro???

    :peace:
    GQ
     
  3. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dats life
    and you know what they say life IS?
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    well... that's why you NEVER should
    jump into anything a serious as marriage...
    especially where children are involved...
    good flow, i ain't hatin!
    -7:spinstar:
     
  5. GYPSYMAN

    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    YeshuJah !

    Lovin and respectin the reality drop right here poet..and thanks for the advice...4 real. excellent flow !

    peace
    g-man
     
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    Afridancr Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yeshujah

    I ain't mad atcha!! Keep on keepin it real!

    real life poetry
     
  7. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was an interesting read.


    Poetically Turn'd Out!
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
  8. YeshuJah

    YeshuJah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks all

    GQ, I'm still around. Just busy between work and a giddup 2 yr old, besides I just didn't feel like writing no more. I'm just kinda like venting on this one.

    shaz, it sure is. I just wish it was my bi***

    wildflower- that's the truth, but anyone who's honest with themselves will admit that you don't have to date forever before you get married, besides, that still ain't no guarantee.

    GYPSYMAN, take it to heart. Its a motha.


    kemestry, no one ever 'knows' with certainty what they can and cannot handle, besides, life will deal you cards that you didn't think exist.

    Afri, thanks.

    cocobutterskyn- I appreciate the time you took to read.



    Thanks all for reading and commenting on the poem.

    JAH Bless.
     
  9. MsPoetic

    MsPoetic Active Member MEMBER

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    Nobody know why a man is insane ...until they walk a mile in his shoes.
    Mad respect for you !

    "Life is like a book .... it makes since the more you get into it "

    Poetic
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Jah

    I can see thangs from that point of view! Thanks bruh!

    Reas
     
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