Black Poetry : Broken

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  1. Inque

    Inque Active Member MEMBER

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    Broken
    Like a china doll so easily
    Shattered
    Dreams scattered
    To an empty wind

    Depression
    Sinks in
    And it’s a losing battle
    A hopeless fight
    I can’t even
    Write

    The rape of my muse
    When she
    Opened herself to you
    And you
    Took her for all she had

    And you
    Left her barren
    And cold
    Old

    Flung into
    An empty wind
    Dreams scattered
    Shattered
    Like a china doll so easily
    Broken
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If it's dirty ...clean it
    If you move it ...put it back
    If you drop it ...pick it up
    but...
    If it's shattered, sweep it up, mop it clean ...and buy another vase.
    Nice piece poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done poet !
     
  4. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Respect sounds kind of like me.... Same style... hmmm... interesting
     
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    I felt the emptiness and despair in this piece. Thank goodness a brighter day will shine. Feeling this vibe.
     
  6. Inque

    Inque Active Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for the love, it gets better everyday...and as I write
     
  7. SmoovVerbiage

    SmoovVerbiage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    anyone who has fallen in and out of love can relate to this piece.

    The hopeless feeling and the pain seems to linger forever.


    nice write. Thanks for sharing


    SmoovV
     
  8. Ikoro

    Ikoro Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ah... Morose. Sombre. Simple.

    Painful. Invokes many feelings. Too many.

    Thanks for sharing.

    ~Ikoro
     
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