Black Poetry : Broken wings....

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  1. DA BROTHER LOVE

    DA BROTHER LOVE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I stand alone....
    Far from home....
    This world keeps me in a war zone
    My father has forsaken me
    Thru this galaxy Im forced to keep
    These Broken wings....
    Broken wings....

    I look up to the sky with a faded smile
    Feeling deserted by my past life
    Now misery has taken me
    On this journey thru eternity
    The stars above seems like home
    Now thru this earth I forever roam
    With these Broken Wings....
    Broken Wings....

    Hoping the day will come
    That I can come back home
    He welcomes me with open arms....
    and I will be his child again!
    A happy day when he shall mend
    These Broken wings... Broken wings....
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There is no therapy like poetry, and no voice such as yours.

    Keep bringin' it!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    poeticly u on point !!
    happy u here to share and bless da page

    welcome to destee.com poeticplayground
    welcome to the new home u found
    welcome from above as i bless ya flow wit love


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    Hey welcome again..
    your pen on fire
    very well posed scribe
    enjoyed it...

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    Peace
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    Those wings get tired of flying sometimes, and just want to soar back home. I felt the weariness in these words.
     
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    DA BROTHER LOVE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah you are right on point.... weariness was one of the feelings i was trying to get across.... i thank all of yall for your support.
     
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    Welcome Poet :wave:

    I love the concept of this piece...
    You've truly made a wonderful entrance.
    Make yourself at home!

    Be sure to read the poetic etiquette and
    continue to return the love that you are
    shown....
    Love, is the common thread that holds us together.

    Much, Much Love to you poet!

    Welcome to our family! :grouphug:
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome brother :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:

    What a entrance :)
    so glad you made it home :)
    Share love and give love my brotha and may your scribe flourish :)
     
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    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this moved me...

    my brother, you captured the sentiment in this piece that I sincerely believe most abandonded sons feel...
    this was wonderful in that it moved me to consider my own (broken wings) abandonment and that is what poetry is supposed to to do...bravo and touche' :toast: :toast: :toast:
    you have a gift...please share it...
     
  10. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    BEAUTIFUL***
    this was a very nice poem
    I enjoyed it

    **Keep Flowin** :sand:

    ***Monad.poetress
     
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