Quiet Poetry Lounge : Broken Records

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Absolut, Nov 10, 2004.

  1. Absolut

    Absolut Active Member MEMBER

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    Broken Records
    By Absolut®



    "The Sweetest Melody"
    Rose from these leaves of May
    While so "Unchaining My Heart"
    Knowing the blues of RAY

    I felt..
    ...
    My..
    .......
    Still Going
    ....
    .....

    Still...

    I feel so..
    ...
    left in the lost of until....
    ..
    ........I feel...
    ..
    Forever loved my time on space
    ...I feel..
    I've lost all my thoughts in tune
    Over...
    faces that just had to watch
    Unsafe...unsafe
    ...
    In touch
    ....
    With eyes dotted in doom
    .....
    I feel...
    ..
    Fate...
    "Singing Me over the moon"
    While
    Piling Lies of beginning dates
    Rise...
    ....soon
    In...
    The darkness of AM's **Wait**
    But never enough...
    I see these days
    The road ahead looks...**fuzy**
    And the going gets...**static**
    I see these days..
    Lyrically as a cloudy page
    Literally
    ..
    I want it to end
    The pace...
    The chase...
    The penning of my RACE

    Broken records,
    ...records broken
    Broken records,
    ...records broken
    Broken records,
    ...records broken
    Broken records...broken records...broken records...
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes we just get tired, dog tired, of the same old same old, the negativity, seemingly just stuck. We can feel that way about ourselves and our race as a whole. I feel ya poet, flow on as you do.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    how i feel you here and u know when the time come a change will too
    tyte drop
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh yes, this is so on. How many times do we repeat the same mistakes and patterns before we learn. This was amazingly dropped.
     
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    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It all comes to a quiet end at some point. Believe me I have heard that same record a time or two.
    Nice piece.
     
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    This is the result…
    Of a well thought out
    And perfectly executed
    Presentation…
    The kind of stuff legends are made of
    Nice use of rhythm

    Sometimes it takes motivation to make
    A transformation and break the record...
    of a "Broken record"...

    Excellent work!
    Sage
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight vibing feeling this one
    Peace
    Angel
     
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