Black Poetry : broken habits?

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  1. mizdee2002

    mizdee2002 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i liked all of the titles ya'll suggested, but brotherman's spoke to my thoughts, specifically....thanx
    dee



    i am a creature of habit
    always loving the least of these
    i feel motivated to please.
    i am a creature of habit
    burning candles at both endz
    r u really my friendz?
    i am a creature of habit
    i can make luv to someone that i don't love
    but no clandestine kisses will be given above...
    i am a creature of habit
    oasis to fractured souls
    yet always deserted, or just left in the cold.
    i am a creature of habit
    smiling lilies and sunshine
    apathy creating fake-ness sublime.
    i am a creature of habit
     
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    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wHOA!!

    Deep Piece Sis!!
    HHHmmmmmmmmmm!!
    "Creature am I"
    "Habitual Creature"
    "What I Am"
    **** I don't know Sis!!!
    I loved the scribe tho!
     
  3. mizdee2002

    mizdee2002 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx lil brutha..i kinda like "what i am..."

    dee
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    how bout *creature of habit*...
    i like the flow of this...
    -7:spinstar:
     
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    I kindda like "habitual creature" myself...
     
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    Title tho' tenative, could be "broken habit"

    I feel the sense of dismay, unappreciated flight into a self reckoning moment where questioning of ones deeds are not balanced with ones reciepts. A very clever abstractness to alturistic characterization as well as poetic appeal to reveal the expectation never asked for...directly. Ya' know?
     
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    i'll call it "creature of habit" (of course)..

    but the piece itself is toooo tyte.
    i undastand it's a habit you have queen.
     
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    mizdee2002 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    brother,

    there is a state of contradiction in which, i as a black woman, sometimes find myself..thank u for appreciating the depth of my journey...


    your friend
    dee
     
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    mizdee2002 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    j'hiah,

    thanx for understanding where i be....

    much luv,
    dee
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked this very much
     
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