Black Poetry : BrightEyes.

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  1. BallOfConfusion

    BallOfConfusion Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I block my smile but I can't deny my bright eyes
    Boy you must be real tired cause been running
    threw my head for the past month.
    Today when I saw you, I was excited to say the least.
    But I didn't want to show it.
    So I block my smile but I can't deny my bright eyes.
    Just seeing you brightened up my day.
    Just a thought of you can brightened up my moment.
    I mean heck I was inspired to write this poem about you.
    But I don't really know you and you don't really know me.
    I'm just a shy girl with a crush with a lil light of hope that
    one day soon you'll try and step to me.
    Until that day I'll just block my smile but I can't deny my bright eyes.
    A smile can say the 1000 words I can't find when you speak to me.
    Ever heard that quote?
    Just sayin maybe I shouldn't block it.
    Maybe I should let it shine a bright as my eyes glow.
    Maybe it will welcome you.
    Maybe you don't care.
    Probably I should step to you and stop being a punk.
    Probably you don't even see my bright eyes
    cause I look to the left when your on the right.
    Probably you don't realize I'm feeling you, cause I guess I don't show it.
    I'm sorry it's just hard for me
    I've never been the type of person to wear her heart on her sleeve
    If only you could see inside of me
    If only I could let you see inside of me
    But for the mean time I just block my smile but can't deny my bright eyes.




    *I like the emotion I had in this I just don't know if it really came together,maybe to many thoughts...what do you guys think?
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I found the emotion in this to be so genuinely pure, and openly expressed, and that just made me smile. I also liked your play on words surrounding the term "bright eyes". :)
     
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    i ain't mad at you poet

    get what's yours

    i'm feeling you

    don't let this stop you either

    some things happen for a reason good or bad