Quiet Poetry Lounge : breathtaking

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  1. tzevi1278

    tzevi1278 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    How, within mere moments, milliseconds in time
    You’ve captivated my mind with mesmerizing movements
    That seems suspended in time, beautifully sublime.
    I marvel at skillfully designed refinements, with a familiar
    Structure

    No breathing takes place

    Your body is bare, as God had intended
    Images imprinted like foot steps in the winter snow
    Will you ever know? Know how my spirits rose,
    Erupting in happiness beyond control
    As you maneuvered your soul down that pole
    That which provided security for your whole existence
    I notice from a distance, your subtle resistance

    Still not a breath

    This world seemed unfamiliar to your true self
    Yet you continue to dance
    It was like this performance was your only outlet for self expression
    Yet I felt a connection, on a level not previously reached
    Muffled speech as you shook what ya mama gave you
    Begging me to save you, I’m more than willing, but am I able
    I sever what connections you had to your past
    As another spectator gently pats you on your ***


    Finally you breathe

    What took 40 minutes to conceive, took 40 weeks to receive
    And trust me I’ll bleed before I allow you to grieve or every have a need
    I still can’t believe I really have a seed
    Finally your dance is over, as you lay upon my shoulder
    I’ll watch you grow as you get older
    From this point on, your life truly starts
    I’ll feed you knowledge of self, god and the arts
    So breathe little one breathe, you embody only the best of me
    And if need be, you can take every breath of me


    Copyright 2004
    © Kiastar inc. Krate Creations publishing
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sweet release here i see ya pen has lots to say
    full of juice ....very nice write poet much respect to da art.
     
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    No breathing takes place...
    ...still not a breath...
    and...
    ...finally...she breaths
    Finally...the exotic touch, that touched her "heart, spirit and mind" ...
    the touch of life.
     
  4. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    wonderful..
    suspenseful...mysterious..
    and freeing...i took a breath too!
    wonderful poem....
     
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    1Greaterthan~I Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the hardest heart would shed a tear after reading this :crying:
    I did
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice flow enjoyed the read...
     
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    Awww, I am so touched by this flow. Your child is blessed.
     
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