Black Poetry : BREATH>~**

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  1. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **A 'Son of the Day Star' Publishing Keystyle

    Couldn't contain it,
    I needed a moment to breath...
    So wrapped up in you,
    lost in you and I can't explain what
    it is you do....
    *To myself* whoooooooooo, exhale baby.
    I give myself time to understand.
    I give myself time to let it all sink in.
    The nsyght I receive leaves me breathless.
    Your loving assaults me violently...
    Wait! Hold up, let me catch my breath please!
    I pause and listen to my heart beat,
    step outside of reality for a moment to just escape this
    heat.
    ...The thought comes;
    Couldn't contain it,
    I needed a moment to breath...
    I can see...
    In fact I feel...
    *To myself* Then again, can I truly hear it?
    Hear, see and feel the breath depart
    on a noiseless breeze?
    I momentarily loose my sense of ease and...
    Oh God! Lovechild, would you just pause and let me
    catch myself and breath?

    *silence*

    Kind of leave's you with a certain__________ feeling
    doesn't it?
    Incredible
    Haunting
    Powerful
    Smooth
    Breezy
    Earth-shaking
    and so, so much more!

    LOVE!

    Nearly leaves me blinded.
    Hmmmmmmmmm.
    But then again, I can't really say anything except;
    Couldn't contain it,
    I needed a moment to breath.​


    ~Copyright
    The year of the Monkey (2004).
    The 93rd year, 4th month, 16th day.
    "Son of the Day Star" Publishing
    ~*PropheticNsyght​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    str8 tyte drop this was on point
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, sometimes those emotions just get to be so much that you have to step outside of yourself, and pause. I hear ya. Keep flowing this way.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was a wonderful piece and I really enjoyed reading it...wait, ..let me breath for a second...
     
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    Whoaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa now if thas not hot i dont know what iz :hot: Brotha you have skillz beyond comparison :bowdown:
     
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    mmmmmmm

    Would you believe me if I said...

    this peace has left me...

    ..............Breathless :sand:

    because the brilliance of your writing...

    *assaults me violently* :wink:

    love that line...


    Wonderful, Wonderful Peace...