Poetry Critiques : Breakup

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Mikha'el, Oct 21, 2009.

  1. Mikha'el

    Mikha'el Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey i'm back! i have another joint for y'all....this one is part of another series im writing....you'll have to read em all to get the gist of the story....the story revolves around me n my personal experiences....i will post the rest of the poems every few days n as they are written...enjoy


    Born into the world possessed feelings for this girl

    She showed mutual intrest & in my heart i was set

    She was feeling the same way so it seemed

    Regardless my life started off in a dream

    I had my dream girl before my life was to begin

    Things were great no better feeling than first place

    But they quickly turned sour n growing fouler by the hour

    Power shifting as she asserted a more dominant position

    Now im sitting here tryna fit in where i get in

    All this while i was young im on the other side of the gun

    The target of frequent attacks of my mental

    Damaging my emoitional leaving me the shell of man

    got me thinkin **** what i'd do to get here

    In the corner while children play sitting here in tears

    My girl laughing at me all the while she saying cheers

    Cheers to suffrage will to fight back i can't muster it

    All the life in me sapped my heart now trapped

    My first n only relationship discarded like a random artifact

    Thrown in the dirt life not tryna **** with me truth hurts

    But at the time i couldn't cope i was on a cloud now im buried in depths

    Of what once was time to lay the past to rest

    But all i can do is regret can't seem to let it go

    I grow cold n lonely feeling as if nobody else will love me

    So in the darkness emerges my two alter egos

    Solo dolo n Heartbreak from here the story only grows colder
     
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    very nice ......
     
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