Black Poetry : Breakout

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by arthur1210, Apr 8, 2005.

  1. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I can feel it, I'm still growing
    Despite the fact I'm grown
    Changing my negative reputation
    Because it's not carved in stone
    I feel people working with me
    I no longer feel alone
    I am hearing a better rhythm
    I am trying to match its tone

    I lost my since of direction
    I lost my reasons to care
    I forgot the world's not perfect
    Everything is not always fair
    Life kept going on around me
    I was completely unaware
    I lost many of my closest friends
    While drowning in my despair

    But now, no more silly reservation
    No more self pity, nor self doubt
    Working to correct my disposition
    And my convictions are devout
    My pathway seems to get smoother
    As, I walk this alternate route
    In my past I created my binds
    But, I am going to break out

    I will exercise my diligence
    Knowing it is my only escape
    My diligence will aid digestion
    Of the meal loaded on my plate
    My diligence makes me stronger
    To tote my load, despite its weight
    It can lead me away from my devil
    And through obstacles he creates

    I am finding the greater value
    With essential tasks that use to bore
    Getting back to better values
    That in youth, were instilled in my core
    Now that I have found the strength
    There is no telling what's in store
    I'm reaching for the knob of triumph
    And I am ready to open the door

    I will make moves with more patience
    I will stand on more stable ground
    I will strengthen my education
    Staying fundamentally sound
    My load's no longer growing
    Each day I put some of it down
    Getting back to the motions
    Of this world that keeps spinning round
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm loving the way your mind has made the necessary adjustments,
    in order to be in control of your destiny.

    You're a winner! :)
     
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    I'm really struck by your flow, arthur. What a great message of personal power, and dang it's tightly written! I specially dig this part:

    I'm reaching for the knob of triumph
    And I am ready to open the door


    What a great image! Nice to see you back here on the board and in full effect.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was awesome and how you made the transistional maze change
    str8 up tyte big ups poet !
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The structure and rhymes in this piece flowed ever so smoothly. And the powerful message, that we can always change for the better if we put our minds to it, invaluable. Flow on poet.
     
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    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    'preciate it!

    thanks, everyone, for the comments of encouragment
    'good to know
    you're feelin' my flow'

    JAG (arthur210)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome keep the ink flowing