Black Poetry : Break my fall

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    falling, falling so hard
    the warmth of your stare
    has caught me off guard.
    wanting so badly
    to give you my trust
    wanting so badly
    something more than lust.
    so tell me youll catch me
    before i hit the ground
    im lost and so lonely
    im waiting to be found.
    please tell meyou can sew
    the peices of my heart back in place
    with bows of shiny ribbon
    and a unbreakable lace
    im counting on you
    to pull me back together
    and help make me feel
    forever better
     
  2. Poetrymama

    Poetrymama Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    re:Break

    Very nice poem.
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When you fall Big Brutha is their to pick to up
    Believe and trust in G-d and he carries you when you feel like you've had enough.
    Thanx for sharing..
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    lovely piece , tyte write
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To have that someone who can mend those broken pieces...This flowed so smoothly and genuinely poet. Flow on.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a nice poem and i enjoyed this read...thanks for sharing
     
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    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    BlatinaPoet4u, this was sooo sweet!

    :heart: moham
     
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    Nice piece poet
     
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    this is beautiful your spoken words touch the heart.
     
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    Alizentang Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    VERY, very DEEPly felt in my heart. It flowed so smoothly as if you really were falling. I understand the feeling. Can't wait to read more of you.
     
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