Black Poetry : Boxed In

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Lynne', Jan 13, 2005.

  1. Lynne'

    Lynne' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When it comes to stuff, like love and trust
    I never seem to give enough
    I’m scared to give and not receive
    I’m afraid I’ll give and then you’ll leave
    I just want to be loved, like everyone does
    And I’m not really sure what the cause of it was
    But I built up this wall, one on each side
    But this desire to be wanted won’t seem to subside
    It’s a fact that I’m trapped in this box I have built
    I’m one minute from drowning in this pool of my guilt
    For having gone so long without sharing my heart
    I had stopped loving; now I’m ready to start
    But I can’t find nobody who will give me a chance
    So far from my goal and can’t seem to advance
    I’ve committed an internal suicide
    The fact that I’m lonely just can’t be denied
    It’s like I have fallen and I can not get up
    All hope has been tainted when I emptied my cup
    And now I lay here helpless, feeling empty inside
    Feeling love is intangible, because desperately I tried
    To touch it, but just when it was at my fingertip
    It moved from my reach and I couldn’t get a grip
    I just can’t understand, it was right by my hand
    This journey for love is not like how I planned
    I’m tired of running and chasing, I can’t take it no more
    I feel I was better off in my box like before
    I’m not sure what may be just around the bend
    But I long for the comfort of those four walls again
    I may build another, but this time with a door
    So that I won’t be stuck if I again decide to explore
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the power of love and it's pain of stress
    that will make anyone explore & confess
    find comfort and happiness it can twist
    and turn make a heart feel and yearn it
    can be destructional and greed love is
    no simple thing .....
    Tyte write love the flow indeed as u know...
     
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    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    omg.... u just captured it... all the emotions .. all the confusion... the desire to change... but still want to be in that "comfort zone".... props be to u....
     
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    Most have been there, not wanting to dare to search for fear they may get hurt. This was written on point, flow on.
     
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    Lynne', you're coming out party has begun

    I loved this one.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Building walls with a door is the best thing to do,
    cause your own true love will be comming for you.

    And the box that you're in, will hide all your beauty,
    we're put here for 'man" to love...and that is our duty.

    That was just beautiful, I really enjoyed reading this piece...step out the box and live it.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You've got mad, mad skills, sister girl. I am deeply feelin this flow. Wow.
     
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    I have felt this way, but after U decide 2 sit still & stop searching 4 love, it'll find U. You're walking 2 far ahead.

    Nice piece.
     
  9. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel u deeply in this passage! Keep flowin!
     
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