Black Poetry : Boom! Boom!

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  1. Harry Hyman

    Harry Hyman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Boom!Boom!

    I felt hot and sticky as a moon pie stuck
    on a old pickup sunbaked Chevy.
    And the battle bruised air in our soot laden lungs
    made the morning taste of gunpowder heavy.

    All my ammo was gone! And all the rifles were gone!
    All the mortar rounds were missing with our gear.
    And we spotted the enemy scrambling in confusion
    'cause their ammoed weapons had also disappeared.

    But our Supply Sarge, unsupplied, had a bold plan.
    He knew a way that we but still could win the day
    using a Positive Mental Attitude at its full force.
    All the battles could be fought with PMA.

    He said "Pretend I'm handing you a loaded rifle.
    When you see the enemy, think and go Bang! Bang!
    and a knife for close encounters when they happen
    and Stab! Stab! will drop your foe yet once again."

    On the field, I had no choice. I thought Bang!Bang!
    and heard the click of ejected shells from fired rounds.
    And in shock, I knew my PMA was working dead on target
    'cause I saw my enemy shot and hit the ground.

    I thought I heard a sound not far, out in the distance,
    as we revelled in the enemy's loss and doom.
    Bang!Bangs! and the Stab!Stabs! were loud all thru the day
    'til a big sound shook the ground. It went Boom!Boom!

    Boom!Boom!heard in the distance.Bang!Bang!sounded small
    Boom!Boom! sounded nearer, Stab!Stab! no sound at all.
    And I saw an enemy soldier, with PMA strong you see, saying
    "Tankity-Tank, Tankity-Tank." Boom!Boom! rolled over me.

    Hurt,I watched the Boom!Boom! explode on a bomb from air
    launched by a comrade soldier's PMA unmeasured and rare.
    Boom!Boom! seemed unusual and maybe a little farfetched
    'til I saw our soldier flying in air saying "Jettidy,Jet,Jet,Jet"

    HH
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    boomin all up in dis joint
    Tyte Harry
     
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    DAM! That was so tight and deep, a mind boggler
    Fantastic write!:kiss1:
     
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    nice write flow on poet.:kiss1:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The wonders of what a positive attitude can do, put into descriptive verse. This was marvelous.
     
  6. Harry Hyman

    Harry Hyman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks everyone for your wonderful words and I am so glad you enjoyed.HH
     
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    I DO like this write.
    So full of substance and depth.
    It's great when positivity is used as a weapon and not only as a shield!
    Good job!!!!!!!!!!!!

    peace and love
    Twision
     
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    Harry Hyman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    twision - Perceptive of you to see positivity as a weapon as well as a shield. I guess that speaks to the duality of most things in Life. Thanks so much for your words and I am so glad you enjoyed. HH
     
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