Black Poetry : Blues Sanger

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  1. NittyGrit

    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    papa was a rolling stone
    now i’m a stumbling pebble
    mama tried to keep me home
    but it was hard to raise a rebel
    that needed an occasional high
    like a song missing its treble
    i wanted to take my blues
    up another level

    a groove child
    the product of southern bass lines
    with a deep and sultry drawl
    that soulful, country kind
    cured in hot churches
    with only one ceiling fan
    i aspired to be like the deacon and pastor
    let the church say a man

    hand claps
    were grandmama’s instrument of choice
    she would throw them up towards heaven
    as the choir raised its voice
    the cadence made the spirit move
    and inspired tambourines
    that ignited more excitement
    than fireworks exploding

    i left the church at sunset
    but wasn’t headed home
    i was speeding down the dusty roads
    towards making it on my own
    i had arrived
    in the nightlife
    so enamored by the bright lights
    that while taking in the sights and sounds
    i thought: if only those country tambourines
    were here to see me now

    I tried everything from open mics
    to casting calls for lookalikes
    but nothing about the big city life
    fit my country profile right
    its hard to get settled
    when you never packed a bag
    even harder finding who you are
    when you can’t find your way back
    home

    I came searching
    for the smile of snapping fingers
    and the crackle of high fives
    between the band and background singers
    i wanted to witness women crying
    as they sang my songs out-loud
    and men inspired to dream higher
    than following a crowd

    I was chasing
    a spirit strong enough
    to move a congregation
    and catapult my lowlife friends
    to an altitude and elevation
    that made them stand for something
    like a preacher and his ovation

    alas
    singing these blues aint nothing new
    i’d been living the lyrics
    ever since my youth
    but now that my search for self
    is stalling in these electric streets
    i’m not sure if I was chasing a dream
    or running from my calling
    to preach
     
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    Blues at the crossroad, told masterfully.
     
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    Blues in a twist effects awesome layout
     
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    Brother Poet NittyGrit,

    This piece is simply wonderful. It is bluesy and truly sings. It is rich with history and delightful details about the subject's initial journey away from his roots and then eventually back to them. The imagery is stark. I could see, feel, touch: the subject, his family members, his lowlife friends, church members and even the unspoken city dwellers. The dusty road he traveled kicked its dirt up in my face. There is so much here that I will revisit over and over again. I love every line but especially, "let the church say a man." This line is inventive and has staying power. I will remember it forever. Beautiful sermon. Thanks for sharing.

    (smile)
     
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    I agree with Bros. 1Poet and Totalview completely!

    Your use of imagery had me right there with ya!

    Indeed, THIS is singing tha Blues!
    While reading, I think I could hear somebody humming on an harmonica. ---That's where this piece took me....This is some hot, dusty, smokey-room, "Hole-in-the-Wall" kinda Blues, right chere!

    Excellent, Bro. NittyGrit!
     
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    Ooops!....Please do pardon, SISTER Totalview!
     
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    i know a little something 'bout them southern moves...and this here will stir up some stuff. NICE. i also know a little something 'bout running from your calling. being the grandson of a baptist minister, and because of my PUSH in the church, it was expected...i was expected to go there. i still feel the pull...still hear the call...every time i sit down with someone and start discussing the good book. it's an awesome feeling. in another life...
     
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    Your feedback is invaluable! I don't take for granted the time you spend dissecting my pieces. The fact that you called this poem a sermon is....profound on so many levels.

    Given the respect I have for your pen, I'm inspired that my humble kites garnish this attention. I sincerely thank you for the encouraging remarks.
     
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    Baller,

    In all my writings the objective is to connect the audience in way that relates and speaks to them on a personal level. In my opinion, the crescendo of any body of artistic work for this connection to move them in some way. Your feedback embodies this objective. It moved you to offer feedback...and it also moved you to reflect on your calling.

    I hope this scribe encourages you to revist that calling. Take it from me...the whisper of the spirit and how it tugs at your heart strings never goes away. I've accepted the calling, now its just a matter of finding my pulpit....God never said it would be inside a church house.

    I look forward to hearing more about that "other life"
     
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    I appreciate the feedback 1PoetSought. Thanks for the encouragement
     
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