Black Poetry : Blue~Tear Song

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  1. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    She sat alone
    with her party dress on
    a blue~tear song
    playin' in the background

    the party dress
    didn't look so good
    anymore
    a little bit too tight
    pulling at the side seams
    kinda faded and worn
    but she wore it anyway

    and that same old song
    just made her feel
    so **** sad
    like it always did
    every time she heard it
    but she played it anyway

    she put herself through
    the same ritual
    every single year
    on this night
    at this time

    always the same

    she thought he was
    going to ask her to
    marry him~that night
    because he'd said
    he had something to discuss
    with her

    so she got all pretty
    wore a new dress
    had the music playin'
    lights down low
    table for two
    soft candlelight and wine
    and hope in her heart

    but it didn't turn out
    like she planned
    went all wrong
    and the hope faded and died

    while he sat across the table
    held her hand
    and told her
    he was in love with someone else

    she remembered trying
    to keep hold of her dingity
    trying not to let him see her eyes cry
    or hear her heart break
    or her voice tremble
    when she told him it was okay

    she succeeded until she heard
    the door close behind him
    and then she lost it

    like she's been losing it ever since

    every year
    just like tonight
    when she found herslef
    at the same place
    at the same time
    with the same party dress on
    same blue~tear song
    playin' in the background

    same memory to keep her company

    (c) nfn 2001
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    gurl dis was a tea-ful lovable piece.....whoa!!!
     
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    All right that settles it, now I try not to consider the poet when selecting which poems I have time to read but I am simply diggin your flow, this poem is so real in both its reality and symbolism. Makes you question the validity of her point of view – should she let it go or was her love so real that to memorialize it this way is to savor the fullness of the entire experience and somehow add value to the present life?
     
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    Tearfully understood!

    You always had a way of reaching down into peoples hidden memories and making us all feel the same thing. You know this has a familiar ring of lost love and melancholy things. But, this was bittersweet..."For it is better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all!"
    Blessings on Your house!
     
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    I just love your work

    that's all that needs to be said :)

    pd
     
  6. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Shery...I guess forever love can be that sad...I wrote this after watching a true love story where her love never came back..I imagined this to be the way she'd feel...but in a way I can relate to it myself...there is nearly always a time like this in every girls heart...even if it is only a brief time...

    Rich..you know I really didn't mean for it to be so sad, just melancholy, but it just turned out this way...

    Shaz..I really appreciate your comments...and I guess it's the way you wanna look at it...to some she would be wasting her life on a man that doesn't want her...others would see that she has only ever loved one man with a love so strong that she cannot let herself love another, and for her that is enough....but then why would she be so sad about it?...

    Mslb...it's a dilemma I guess...and only she can know the right way to go..and sometimes the heart speaks for itself....

    pd...you are just tooo sweet....

    K
     
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    kt.


    ...this read like a beautifulpainful-lypoetic story!

    i keep tellin' you that i love what you do with words...
    you never disappoint the reader!! thank you for
    sharing your work with us!!

    :heart: itsallLove, chile!!

    elayne.
     
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