Black Poetry : blind trust in the family that shaped you

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, Aug 22, 2002.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    an evil spiders web weaved between
    mother and son
    against husband and wife
    you fall prey
    to her poison
    hidden behind a mask of religion
    good intentions
    other dimensions

    do you not see
    the worst fights of our life
    come when her words
    like ice
    freeze our happiness
    in zip lock bag
    stagnation

    you’re too busy feeding
    your temper
    your emotional outbursts
    sap the strength from this queen
    leave her drawn and used and fused
    with confusion
    making her soul a husk

    you spend your time
    living life in four cornered restriction
    perfect diction
    the diameter points of a perfect fade
    military brigade
    you march in place and wear out the carpet

    i move around you
    secretly living my life, my dreams
    committed to you
    yet committed to myself
    my own happiness
    which you always monitored or stopped
    with your words
    but my life
    my dreams continue
    and when they bloom outside of your peripheral vision
    you now try to stop it
    with
    y
    o
    u
    r
    hands
     
  2. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    wonderfully captured

    i assume you are referring to a case of domestic violence

    excellent work lady :)

    keep writing

    pd
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    hummmm! one's hands now take da place of wordz how dare he !
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bravo!

    You are a most enjoyable read Red...

    Reas
     
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    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Two things I pick up from this piece 1. the involvement of a third person and secondly how directly or indirectly this third involvement has somehow led to the downfall-hence some form of domestic violence in the relationship...two is company-three is a crowd in a marriage-this from a person who doesn't even have a boyfriend???? ha, seriously though, my family gone through some stuff like that...two should stick together...momma's boy needs to grow up and insecure woman needs to get secure..!

    lo'..
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mkhaya lo' true, true and true! Thanks for understanding my piece!
     
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