Black Poetry : BLASPHEMOUS CRIES (lpoet and mind~$oul colabo)

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  1. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    me and my man posted this on another board hope u enjoy


    (mind~$oul)

    who is this person I see
    I see me
    Malik E
    death is my destiny
    it doesn't scare me
    I'm ready
    for my
    untimely

    i hear the calls
    of the land
    decorated
    with fire and brimstone
    ruled
    by lost souls
    silent...
    you can hear the cries
    of a 2 year old

    god oh god!
    do you hate me?
    i said...I am! (h.wood)
    and i heard a cold voice
    scream
    blasphemous you!
    blasphemous you!
    i feel isolated
    even demons
    stray away from me
    untimely
    you must come
    quickly
    before i go on a
    rampage
    too sick
    to see

    (lpoet)

    who is this I see
    with eyes afire blazing
    a hole through the back
    of my head
    surely this person isn't me

    suicidal thoughts run wild
    through his cluttered mind
    I scream out "NO" but he
    Doesn't here me
    I need to let him know that
    This just isn't the right time

    If only our thoughts could
    Intertwine but he is focused
    On evil and me the divine
    I pray while he releases his
    Emotions in tattered red notebooks
    Between tiny blue lines

    I here the words
    Blasphemous you!
    Blasphemous you!
    I cover my ears the voice
    Is so loud that it sounds as if
    It is from the very bowls of the
    Devil indwelt

    My insides begin to burn and
    Cold sweat beads begin to chase
    Each other down the sides of my face
    My body begins the tremble and I/we
    Collapse to the floor

    He killed me he killed himself he killed us

    While I ascend to heaven and he descends
    To hell he desperately reaches for my hand
    what for?
    turning and shaking my head
    I mumble
    Its just to late
    I cant save the man in the mirror anymore
     
  2. MissPoetik

    MissPoetik Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    blasphemous cries

    [email protected] this was deep... kept me reading until the end. great collabo.
     
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    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is awesome, powerful and just plain off da hook!!!
     
  4. Legacy21

    Legacy21 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    *Mouth drops open* I am blown away, and taken aback by the raw energy and power in this piece. This is one of the most darkly compelling collabos I have ever read. ****, is all I can say.........****.....
     
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    "NICE"

    "That was deep" I really liked the flow of the union together...
    keep it flowing. Be blessed Queen:toast:
     
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    whoa. i just sat there a sec with my mouth open. i LOVED this poem...especially the end.

    madd props to you both!
     
  7. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks so much for the replies everyone
     
  8. elayne.

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    lp.


    ...& the growth spurt continues. :wink:

    i'm diggin' the gothic feel of this piece.
    be sure to tell mind-$oul that i said you
    2 did a great job. :)

    alwayspeace,
    elayne.
     
  9. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks so much elayne
     
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    Interesting subject matter
    keep it comin
     
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