Black Poetry : blank stares

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  1. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    staring
    ...glossy eyed
    out across the
    evening sky

    thoughts of you are created

    tonight
    i wonder where

    you are

    composing myself
    i swallow
    all pride
    so as not to share
    my loss with
    the light of a million
    stars
    in exchange -- i offer
    each star a blank stare

    thoughts of you have dissapated

    tonight
    i know

    you are

    with her...





    2002 N2urSoul
     
  2. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bitter sweet sentiment!

    A simplistic prose from someone who knows speaks volumes!
    Find peace in sweet release...for the gift of scribing, keep on vibing...there is healing in the words that we share, cause
    somebody out there, feels the same way too. They just might not know how to reply!
    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!:cool:
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    gurl!!!!
    now i know dis so well
    feeling it within......speak on!
     
  4. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hm!
    beautiful bittersweet sentiment. :spinstar:
     
  5. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sheeeeeeeeeee's baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaack!!! Hasn't missed a beat. 10
     
  6. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    family -

    I thank you for reading and for each
    of your individual responses
    as well.

    Much :heart: and respect


    N2
     
  7. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa -


    That's a suprise ending I DID NOT see coming at all.

    I read the line about not sharing your loss with the light of a million stars over and over b-4 i scrolled down, so it really
    hit me at the end.


    Masterful flow Big Sis
     
  8. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this one.
    it kinda left me hanging......in a good way.
    u flowed it....

    b.e.z.
    hw
     
  9. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    N2

    Please believe that i've missed reading you ma... loved it! (but you coulda made it a happy ending...lol)

    Reas
     
  10. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was beautiful in it's simplicity...a heart laid bare and the pain that comes with it...

    K
     
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