Khasm13 : blak jack(1 of 2)

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  1. Khasm13

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    a king was looking for an ace
    so he could win the paper chase
    turning down all cards that had a face
    he searched every place
    when all of a sudden
    some jacks sprayed him with mace
    and blinded his eyes
    whispering 9's laced the wind with lies
    as floating 5's flew through the sky
    a group of 1's saw this incident
    as they passed by
    the jacks broke camp
    and let out a war cry
    the staggered king repeatedly wiped his eyes
    then the first 1 said hi
    my king, why are you out here alone
    on the wrong side of the tracks
    so far from home?

    the red eye king
    still felt the sting
    looked at the first 1
    and felt the warmth of the afternoon sun
    thank you 1
    i thought i was going to have to run
    but i'm looking for an ace
    i don't feel complete
    my mouth always has a bad taste
    my body feels like it's going to waste
    if i die my genes will go with me encased
    have you seen an ace?

    just then some 2's and 8's walked in
    and heard the talk of an ace
    the third 2
    bowed down to the king
    as the other numbers let him thru
    aces are hard to find, said the 2
    no one i've known has ever seen one
    some say they are myths
    added the first 1
    the wise king did not let
    this bad news stun
    he said thanks 8's 1's and 2's
    but this ace i must continue to persue
    that's what my faith has taught me to do
    walking down the winding path
    peeping out of the bushes
    sick 6's curled their mouth to laugh
    at this king of spades
    as it started to pour rain
    he took shelter under a giant tree's shade
    and took time to ponder what God made
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i am lovin this...waitin for part 2..
    work dat pen my brother....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    da game not ova .....pt ll please
    lovin this flow
     
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    Wow, this was very imaginatively posed, I enjoyed this. Did it take you long to write?
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow this is nice you got my attention...waiting to see how it all comes out wow
    Peace
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now make me understand why you would want to with hold that poetic mastermind from us for so long? :huh:
    Are u trying to cause a riot or what? lol
    as always my creative king you amaze me :)
     
  7. angelicsage

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    I'm just wondering if you've grown tired
    or hearing how much I love your writing
    you always bring such originality and imagery
    blazing new trails for the mind, whether to
    entertain or to enlighten...it's always
    amazing...

    feeling the flow!
     
  8. Khasm13

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    thanks mzblk, rich, watzin, blue triniti and angeli :)

    watzin...naw it didn't take long...having a sound concept is the key :)

    triniti...me cause a riot? lololol only if it's to shut down BET :lol:

    angeli...i'll never get tired of hearing your wise words...never, it was just that other forums needed my attention, and still do...i have to represent for the righteous black man...no doubt

    thanks again everyone...i hope this story makes sense :)
    one love
    khasm
     
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