Black Poetry : Black tears…

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MzBlkAngel, Jul 27, 2004.

  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ok fam i aint lost my mind or going
    weird on yall this is out
    my book and short story


    Black tears…
    From the sky
    Fall…..
    Fire boils and the inside dies…
    Like a thief in da middle of the night
    It hides in the dark..and lurks during the day….
    Feeds of joy …kicking as hard as it can…
    Then!! It drops you
    Clouds look down an engulfs the sorrows
    And sweep the pain that try to hide
    Pretending to breathe when can’t
    Turning many colors
    Do you dare?
    As emotions flame raw and bare
    Heart grows cold and the love unfolds..
    A bite of everlasting passion
    Cant bare….STOP!!!
    For the soul no longer breathes..
    As the wind begins to blow…
    A thief comes and covers thy soul
    Like a serpent…steals the spirit…
    Breaks you down…as the weakness builds
    Blind from the promise….hopeless of life
    Trying to pick up and mend…
    When it should of killed you…
    It comes quick….no time to stop
    Once it wraps you…..
    Like a poor man looking for gold
    Haunts its prey….to destroy
    And there sits a gem of a black pearl
    Ruby love….passion of all…..
    With a look of a Queen….
    From a thief called love
    She became the
    Queen of Darkness

    (C) 2004
    From
    bite of passion
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    starz above shinning bright so now comes da light
    to da queens delight dis was tyte
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The imagery in this piece is gripping, it definitely leaves an impression on the mind. Keep flowing.
     
  4. jazzymoonchild

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    Whoa, Angel. I liked this alot. I have to read the story too.
     
  5. angelicsage

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    Wonderful imagery...
    and air of mystery...
    I like this piece...

    Great write Sister!
     
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    :hammer: Nut'z? :hammer: You Nut'z? :hammer: well not all the time....lol :laugh:
    But the poem here is tight and im sure the story will be just as tight as the others were!!! :coffee:
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    MzBlkAngel...

    I've never seen this side of you. I truly believe that you can write all the moods of sadness or evil...if you choose to.

    :thanks: for sharing your talent with us.

    :toast:
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now you gonn make me think that you're a jack of all trades, which I'm sure you are, this was very catchy and it caught me. enjoyed reading this.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa, sis, this a new style and kinda drop for ya, and I likes it mucho. Got all wrapped up in it, I did.
     
  10. Alpha Male

    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Reply to mzblkangel

    mzblkangel, from black tears to the Queen of darkness
    Is this poem about some malady call lovesickness?
    Is it about some jilted woman, who lost her lover?
    Please mzblkangel, I want to know and discover

    I read it five times, Yes I am perhaps very dense
    mzblkangel, rush the news I can't stand the suspense!



    Mzblkangel, Do Seize the day!
    Great poem you have made!
     
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