Poetry Critiques : Black Souls of Poetry….(1)

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  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I posted this in get your flow on sometime ago and got awesome replies so lets see whats really going on....where you be Khasm part 1 and 2 over here now...QQn

    Black Souls of Poetry….

    Within the light it was giving birth
    Old hymns plight of life…
    Forth placed on paper
    Molding in perfection
    Going in the right direction
    As floatation begins
    Depth and profound calling
    Black Souls of Poetry

    Like a chain reaction
    It went through her soul
    And over poured into sorrow…
    Releasing the pain
    Reaction of the chain…
    Breed us like animals
    Picking the strongest and
    Tearing the family apart…
    Growing with out our roots
    As her belly full but not all
    Blackness of our Ancestors
    For it was tainted
    And they took her away
    Before she could see her
    Reaction of the chain…
    And left her in the kitchen
    Now we got to search and read..
    To learn who we are
    Who I am....
    Black Souls of Poetry..

    Do you hear the cry?
    As we walk this walk
    Trying to rebuild
    It’s a milestone on high
    Our souls flow deep like a river
    Across the horizon within
    Words and the meaning
    Of all meanings…
    Reaction of the chain…
    We are the people of this land
    Giving new meaning as we reach
    Telling of history and our future
    As our Ancestors left us
    With knowledge
    To release….and rebuild
    The power we have inside
    Releasing in a path of freedom
    With blessing forth to come
    Be still as it reaches your soul
    Reaction of the chain…

    Drifting on the Black River
    Deep within the soul
    As we under turn
    For we shall climb the mountain
    Reaction of the chain…
    To fill the pail of sorrow
    To become stronger…
    On the knowledge
    We learn and share
    Black Souls of Poetry

    (C) 2004
    Black Souls of Poetry
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Angel, this is as strong as ever! To improve it, regroup the phrashing for emphasis, as one might do in a spoken word piece; each revelation coming on a breath of fresh air. ~
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the creation and concept hit and manifest a master piece
    very nicely written and pose'd sista this show you have
    reached a stat of a higher level
     
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    Thank you Angel for sharing.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To me, it's awesome and I see no room for change
     
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