Black Poetry : ~~~~BLACK RAIN~~~~

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  1. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **Small portions of this uses "Black Rain" from Teena Marie's La Dona album.

    Black Rain....
    Falling deeply on the inside.
    Couldn't stand to watch you
    leave.
    Needed you to exit stage left with haste.

    Rain falling down my
    window pane,
    there wasn't anything to gain.
    I was left with a dull pain,
    watching you leave.....
    staring at the sky and now
    I’m swimming in
    Black Rain.

    A love affair went wrong...
    I lost sight of how we
    operated somewhere back there...
    somewhere in the infinite past
    I lost sight of our identity as one and
    saw the instead of flying light and free,
    again and again;
    I'm now baptized by flame....
    Looking at myself standing proud and ordained.....

    Black Rain
    Falling deeply on the inside...
    My nerves are raw,
    my blood runs like straw.....
    all wound up on cigarettes and
    cold coffee grounds...
    Watching you exit,
    I realize that I've loved you so...
    but its 2004 and I must let you go....
    I can't stand this rain falling on the
    inside of my window pain.

    I have to backtrack and find me,
    before its too late,
    even though I loved you...
    I can't stand anymore love-hand-me-downs...
    I can't take anymore tears of a silent clown...
    Sweet Black Rain,
    I wallow in pain soothing
    the scalding of being
    baptized by flame and now
    I’m on the opposite shore
    watching you leave....
    seeing myself ordained and watching
    you through the Black Rain...
    leave with a frown...
    I'm no longer a sucker for
    reverbs and nouns and no more
    love-hand-me-downs.....

    Sweet Black Rain.....

    Coyright 2004
    "Son of the DayStar"
    "Poeta Nascitur, Non Fit!"
     
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    Muse Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Daaaang....

    "my blood runs like straw.....
    all wound up on cigarettes and
    cold coffee grounds..."

    The visual was too crucial. This was a talented write.

    -Muse
     
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    So emotional, so... "prophetic!" Good. Let's have more!
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much for your love. As always you are truly an inspiration...my muse! LOL Blessings and peace. Love eternal; simply stated, deeply meant and felt.
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sis, this coming from you as the Poetess of the Week, is truly a blessing and honor! Thank you for your love!
    Love eternal; simply stated, deeply meant and felt.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow.............dark shadow my heart pumppin fast
    black rain drops fall tyte masterful scribing
     
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    Needing a love just for you not hand me downs....as usual. Love your descriptive verse. That Teena Marie cd is off the hook, isn't it?
     
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    Whoa, your pen is on fiyah lately. This is hot.
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Man thank you for your love. I appreciate it greatly.
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you ma. Yes Ma'am that Teena Marie CD is the lick!!!!!!!!!!! I'm diggin her vibe especially #'s 5 and 16 of course.